my future book

[Rhadiel]

my future book

Hey guys, I just wanted to know what you would think about a book i plan on writing when I'm older(I plan on being an author). It will be called

Heres a preview

The Lords of Elonan
The Burning Blade
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In the land of Elonan, a great war is breaking out between the the two kingdoms of Hyral and Galgos.
In the kingdom of Hyral, lives the noble Herial family.
Due to the familys mysterious death of the father, the oldest son, Dycegard must become the leader of the Hyral Knights.
Dycegard refuses, due to his own plans. Because of this, the second eldest, Lexan takes the leadership willingly. So the youngest of the family, Rhadiel, and his friend Jables and many others are under the command of his brother.
To make this preview short, the Hyral Knights, or whats left of them, eventually find themselves on a journey to destroy a legendary artifact known as the burning blade.
So, prepare for this twisting legendary story of bravery, treachery, courage, and betrayal.

:ninjaI didnt go into full detail, but who cares....and this is NOT a future fanfic...it is a BOOK i will write hwn im older):ninja:



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[blu phoenix]

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I enjoy reading your stories. You keep at it and one day you'll be a fine writer. Like I said persuing a career in literature and being a writer is great, we always need more I say(cause I can't get enough of books and all). This sounds like a very nice story, which hopefully I'd like to read the full version someday. Good luck Rhadiel, and +rep for your stories and determination.

 

[Sephiroxas]

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Hyral? Sounds like Hyrule. :lol:

 

[Rhadiel]

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Thanks blu. Hopefully I WILL become an author...I might also do my own illistrations for it...but i bet i can get som1 for that lol

 

[HodgePodge]

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+++reppage to you my friend, sounds like something I would definitely read

 

[andythegill]

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good luck with that and remember you old buddys at projectego (ME)

 

[Rhadiel]

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dont worry i WILL remember.....i prolly wont forget this site till im old and wrinkled
and ill make sure i get u guys copies lol

oh and the main characters name Rhadiel is pronounced (Rod ee el)

 

[Angel]

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Why wait until you are an adult to become a writer? Nothing stopping you now from writing and sending manuscripts out to prospective publishers...if anything now is a great time to start doing that because you are not basing your entire income on whether it gets published or not and can get a foot in the door before leaving school and having to find a job whilst trying to make time for writing.

You're good at it - so why make yourself wait? I know it's not the same thing, but there is a series of kids books called the Garden Gang that were written and illustrated with felt tips by a nine year old girl - they were incredibly popular and she made a small fortune in the nineties by Ladybird publishing her books as part of their learning programme for kids.

You've got talent and you should keep working at your book now because you never know - some of your greatest ideas could come whilst you're young and if you wait until you are older, you may lose some of them along the way.

 

[Rhadiel]

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Why wait until you are an adult to become a writer? Nothing stopping you now from writing and sending manuscripts out to prospective publishers...if anything now is a great time to start doing that because you are not basing your entire income on whether it gets published or not and can get a foot in the door before leaving school and having to find a job whilst trying to make time for writing.

You're good at it - so why make yourself wait? I know it's not the same thing, but there is a series of kids books called the Garden Gang that were written and illustrated with felt tips by a nine year old girl - they were incredibly popular and she made a small fortune in the nineties by Ladybird publishing her books as part of their learning programme for kids.

You've got talent and you should keep working at your book now because you never know - some of your greatest ideas could come whilst you're young and if you wait until you are older, you may lose some of them along the way.

hmmmm i actually think ur right....but.....to start writing it....ill need Microsoft word on my comp....its not on here anymore...and i dun feel like actually 'writing' it...=]

 

[LionHeadTex]

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I read the summary. It sounds very cool, and your constant thrive to make better and more descriptive writings really do something. I'm a book nerd, I sit on the ground in the library and I never keep my eyes off the book. Though, your writing pulls me in just the same way. Because as long as you ask yourself this when you write:

If I was this person, what would I do? How would I act? What is my past and what is my future? And when the book ends, where will the reader...the characters...and the world be?

And you stay consistent, you'll be a bestselling author. I know it. But the most important thing to put in a book is heart. You have to feel your characters in the story. You should think about what happened to them in the past, and what makes them what they are today. Even villains. You have the pull the reader to a different world, and convince them to stay for that time. Because when they read your book, its your time to tell the story. No one else.

And a lot of authors write books concerning what the people want. Don't do that. Follow your own story. Rowling did, Tolkien did, all the authors that we know and love did. You see dude, books are doors to me. Shows aren't. When I open the door, Earth or not, I expect something not only different...and interesting. I like to walk into the situation, and see how people react. And I can only do that if the author makes the book realistic, in the sense of emotion. I feel like with more practice, you could be like those people. Rhadiel, you got a gift man. And you should never, ever, stop what you're doing.

Peace
-LHT:ninja:

 

[Rhadiel]

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Im actually basing Rhadiel on me...he'll be similar to me...blond...youngest in the family, imperfect, has his moments, older superior siblings, and, theres ALOT i left out of that preview, Rhadiel and his group of friends become known as Heretics after they murder a church official after the church official after killed Rhadiels brother. that event happens fairly in the beginning.

 

[LionHeadTex]

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Im actually basing Rhadiel on me...he'll be similar to me...blond...youngest in the family, imperfect, has his moments, older superior siblings, and, theres ALOT i left out of that preview, Rhadiel and his group of friends become known as Heretics after they murder a church official after the church official after killed Rhadiels brother. that event happens fairly in the beginning.

Yea it's always good to base a character off the author, gives it a better build

 

[Angel]

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Indeed- C.S Lewis wrote his Narnia series based on how he would have wanted another author to write it for him if he were a child. It's an excellent formula.

You don't have to write the whole thing now or anything - just keep going at it as and when you feel inspired and you have the time. All I'm saying is, there is no reason to wait until you're an adult to pursue your dream - start now and who knows what you will have accomplished by the time you're an official grown-up?

Make drafts, keep a notebook of scraps of ideas - whatever works for you. And then when you are ready you can begin to create and add to the story you really want to write.

 

[Skorm's Son]

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looks good so far



don't forget us when you're famous:'(

 

[Rhadiel]

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lol i wont...ill prolly keep a notebook....and im actually having sephi make cover art for me lol. just for now tho...and andy gave her some sneaky admin rep...im also hoping one day my book can become a movie..then eventually a video game lol

RANDOM RUMOR: J.K Rowling said that after she made her 7th HP book, she said there might be enough left over for an 8th book lol. hope so.

 

[Rhadiel]

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Hey guys, i decided to change the subtitle of the book.Its now The Lords of Elonan : The Breaking

and theres a tiny bit of a change in the order of events im the book:ninja:.
Heres a "refreshed" preview (basically the first little bit of the book)

The Lords of Elonan
The Breaking

Rhadiel rushes down the halls of Herial Manor, his feet echoing against the stone floor.He then quickly goes to his father, Galen's side, who is lying in bed, very ill.His older brothers, and his sister are there as well...The eldest, Dycegard has nothing but a stern look on his face, and his other Lexan, shows a face of sadness and shock. His sister, Emmere, is crying loudly. "Do not cry, my daughter" Galen said, as lightning strikes outside in the storm...Emmere continued her weeping, not paying attention...Galen then turned to Lexan. " My dear son Lexan, due to your older brothers refusal, you must now take the leadership of the Hyral Kngihts..." Lexan said nothing. "I'm growing old...its up to you four to continue...."
Galen then looked at Rhadiel, "Come here, let me look at you" Rhadiel walked forward and met his fathers gaze."You have become a fine man my son, I love you oh so very much.....become a fine knight...Rhadiel"
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[LionHeadTex]

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Gotta say, I'm touched :'(

jk :lol:

Yea I like the bit. My only suggestion is close sentences rather than continuing them with punctuation. Oh yea, it's always good to describe more in these scenes. Make the reader feel that situation, you know. Splitting important quotes is one way of doing that.

Instead of:
"You have become a fine man my son, I love you oh so very much.....become a fine knight...Rhadiel"

Maybe this:
"You have become a fine man my son, I love you oh so very much....." Gripping on to his palm, his voice began to fade with the storm, "become a fine knight...Rhadiel"

Closing his aging eyes, the great Galen loosened his grip on his son. Rhadiel let go, and ceremonially placed Galen's fine longsword on his father chest. A last bolt of lightning stroke, lighting the glooming shadow in the room. Lexan put his hand over his face, faintly weeping, trying to keep his sadness within his plate. But it was inevitable, even for a knight, to shed tears.

I know, what I put isn't that good, but all i'm saying is put a bit more detail. Other than that, the writing is awesome. Keep it up.

 

[Rhadiel]

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yes i know, like i said...its only a preview....the real thing will be MUCH more detailed.:lol:

EDIT: I might actually take what u put and put it in the book lol, with a few minor changes that is.

 

[LionHeadTex]

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yes i know, like i said...its only a preview....the real thing will be MUCH more detailed.:lol:

EDIT: I might actually take what u put and put it in the book lol, with a few minor changes that is.

Yea fine with me. I forgot it was only a preview for a moment, because when I was done reading your bit...I was like,"What the hell's gonna happen next?". It wasn't a crude reply, I was just really interested in it. At the end I asked myself, "So, how is Lexan going to deal with this, will he be a good leader?".

Rest assured, you're writing is still great even in a preview. It isn't like this:

The knights went towards their father. "lexan, you're the leader now...rhadiel, you're a good son...ahh!" Galen was dead. Everyone cried. :hmm:

I could, reading these bits so far, see that this could be a movie. All you have to do is make sure you don't pull an Eragon (I like the books, but they did take alot from other things). Don't get me wrong, you can take little snippets and character personalities, but here's how Eragon was:

Eragon (Luke) finds an egg. He realizes he's now the last dragon rider (Jedi). He figures out from Brom (Ben Kinobi) that there used to be a lot of dragon riders (Jedi). But they were killed by the mighty Galbatorix (Darth Vader). :wacko:

That's just the beginning, but you get my drift. I'm positive this book that your making won't have any plagiarism, but keep that in mind.

EDIT: You can even put that kind of stuff in, it's just Eragon went the same direction as Star Wars essentially. (As a movie) You can put Dragons, Orcs, even Elves. Just don't follow another series.