Poem.

[Firis]

Poem.

New one:
Were a book of prize,
a book of shame.
Offering answers,
giving lies.
Bird of Hermes,
eat my wings to make me tame.
I trust in you,
you trust in me.
In this emotional oddity.
I try to win,
I try to lose.
Its all in your hands,
my outcome you choose.
Only you, and you alone,
errors of my ways you have shown.
Teach me more, give me a test,
I promise to you I will be the best.
Why you ask? I dont know,
But in a world of darkness... You are my glow.

 

[Cobalt Gamer]

Re: Poem.

Awesome +rep

 

[moonfever]

Re: Poem.

Beautiful.+rep Love your poem.

 

[TRA Rotid]

Re: Poem.

It`s nice... up until the very last line - I don`t know, to me it slams the poem down to mediocrity.
But +rep is coming and overall I liked it.

 

[Firis]

Re: Poem.

Ty guys! havent done one in a while, and I figured I would make up for missing the comic competition... Why does it bang it down though, I MUST IMPROVE!

 

[TRA Rotid]

Re: Poem.

I don`t know, I think it`s because the "you`re my light in darkness" motive has been used too much already. It`s just my opinion and as I said, it was overall pretty nice. This is coming from a guy who isn`t much into poetry.

 

[Trawgdor]

Re: Poem.

New one:
Were a book of prize,
a book of shame.
Offering answers,
giving lies.
Bird of Hermes,
eat my wings to make me tame.
I trust in you,
you trust in me.
In this emotional oddity.
I try to win,
I try to lose.
Its all in your hands,
my outcome you choose.
Only you, and you alone,
errors of my ways you have shown.
Teach me more, give me a test,
I promise to you I will be the best.
Why you ask? I dont know,
But in a world of darkness... You are my glow.

Wow... that's deep. I don't really quite full understand it though. It's a... dark love poem? "But in a world of darkness... You are my glow."

+rep that was beautiful. ^_^