Smile for the Darkness

[Devalion]

Smile for the Darkness

Smile for the Darkness



When that bright sun goes down

And you are all alone,

Nothing makes a sound.

Can you see it?

It knows you as well as you do;

All alone, dimly lit

It comes every time

Always the same

Reminding you of your crimes.



Visions unending

Those teeth so bright

Of my mind it’s rending;

Of my failures it speaks;

Whispers to me in the dark,

“God you have become so weak.”



A wrong turn to nowhere;

All I ever wanted to do

Was to show her

This light within

I knew I had.

The light is gone and now I just grin.

I have died three times.

O’ how they hurt;

Me and my three sins.



Pearly slashes in the night,

Glowing yellow eyes,

A horror bred of blight;

It turns to me and I guess

Another night begins

So I give a smile for the darkness.​

 

[andythegill]

Re: Smile for the Darkness

Good, but top this! (its a literal sense a the end not a metaphor) ...

The sky was dark,
The moon was high,
All alone just she and I.

Her hair was soft,
Her eyes were blue,
I knew just what
She wanted to do.

Her skin so soft,
Her legs so fine.
I ran my fingers
Down her spine.

I didn't know how
But I tried my best.
I started by placing
My hands on her breast.

I remember my fear,
My fast beating heart.
But slowly she spread
Her legs apart.

And when I did it,
I felt no shame.
All at once
The white stuff came.

At last it's finished.
It's all over now.
My first time ever,
At milking a cow.

 

[Darg]

Re: Smile for the Darkness

Good, but top this! (its a literal sense a the end not a metaphor) ...

The sky was dark,
The moon was high,
All alone just she and I.

Her hair was soft,
Her eyes were blue,
I knew just what
She wanted to do.

Her skin so soft,
Her legs so fine.
I ran my fingers
Down her spine.

I didn't know how
But I tried my best.
I started by placing
My hands on her breast.

I remember my fear,
My fast beating heart.
But slowly she spread
Her legs apart.

And when I did it,
I felt no shame.
All at once
The white stuff came.

At last it's finished.
It's all over now.
My first time ever,
At milking a cow.

Um... I have to admit... that's... interesting... but it's probably not best to post your own poems on someone else's thread. It takes the focus off of them, and I kind of suggest you make your own thread where you can write whatever you want. But anyway, Devalion, that's amazing! Poems need a bit of darkness, a touch of the side more in shadow, really. It's brilliant really. +rep for some awesome writing.

 

[Steve]

Re: Smile for the Darkness

Beautiful. I cried.

Well, I didn't really but good stuff... Well done. +rep

 

[andythegill]

Re: Smile for the Darkness

I didnt write that by the way but first poem was good.

 

[Triz]

Re: Smile for the Darkness

Nice.... Beautiful! +REP