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The Last Halloween

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The Last Halloween

The Last Halloween
Part 1.



It was going to be a normal night for the three teenage boys, Toilet Papering the normal teenage stuff for Halloween. But little did these kids know.. This was going to be there Last Halloween.

I ran quickly in the darkness over to my friend Colin’s house. Colin was about 6’5 and was only 12 years old going on 13. Colin ran out of his house with a duffel bag full of toilet paper. “Who else is coming?” asked Colin. “Well if we can get mesa… then probably… 3 people… “That’s just great” Colin replies. “Well at least we will have more toilet paper to ourselves!” I said.


We next ran over to Mesa’s house. Mesa was only 4’11 or maybe 5’0 now, he had brown curly hair with black eyes. He only brought out about 5 rolls of toilet paper and said “It’s all I could get on such short notice.” Mesa never was prepared… always living life for the moment. “So who are we getting first?” asked Colin. “How about Jake?” Mesa replied. “Yeah lets go get Jake he has a bunch of trees he will be ****ed!” I said. Colin laughed and said “Alright then lets get going. I only got till 1:00 AM.” Little did Colin know… He was going to miss that curfew.


It was around 9:00 PM or 10:00 PM now and we had a lot of houses to get if we wanted to be noticed so we ran over to Jakes house and started getting TP out. “This is gonna be sweet!” Colin said in a whisper. We got about half done when a cop car came driving by. “Oh ****!” said Colin. “Run” added Mesa. We got split up as the cop was chasing us. We never thought of getting caught and we didn’t know where to meet up at if we did get split up. Normally cops would let us have out fun… I mean it doesn’t hurt anyone, but this town was different, everyone in the town took things to seriously. I don’t get why everyone is so uptight…

After about 3 minutes of running and hiding, we all went searching for each other. But as I walked the streets I noticed… there were no more “Trick Or Treaters” or lights on in houses… “Mesa! Colin! Can anybody hear me!?” I yelled. There was no reply and I started to freak out… So I ran home to see if my parents or my friends might have gone there to meet back up… No one answered the door. I started to cry… I wasn’t exactly scared… Just… Lonely… So I moved on just to see more… Nothingness. Where was I to go and what was I to do? I’m not sure. All I knew was that tonight was going to be a night I would never forget.
 
Re: The Last Halloween

well... it's not bad... but it kind of switches perspectives halfway through the story...
in the beginning you were referring to yourself in the 3rd person... then you suddenly switched to using "I" and "we"... was that intentional?
 
Re: The Last Halloween

As I kept looking and walking down every alley way I notice a figure standing up by a house… TPing…It was Colin! I ran quickly over to him and I noticed that mesa was there to… Wonder how I didn’t see him… “Where were ya?” asked Colin. “I was looking for you!” I yelled. “Isn’t it kinda strange that no one is home?” I said. “Yeah” Colin said. I then had a crazy idea, Since no one is home…”How about we TP and soap EVERYONE in the town!” “SWEET LETS GO GET STARTED!” Colin said. “Yeah this will be fun!” Mesa replied. So we got everybody except for one person in the town. It was nearly 2:00 AM and we wanted to get that one house before we stopped. We had to go back to Colin’s place to get more TP though… as we walked up we noticed that everyone’s cars, trucks, and vans were parked at the high school. We walked up to the door and then I froze… I just remembered… The High School basketball team one 1st place trophy for state… Then an Officer tapped us on the back and said “You guys are in BIG trouble.” The next day the cops concluded that since we were the only 3 not at the basketball stadium, we had to be the people who did it. The cops made us clean all of it up… it took for DAYS and we decided… That this was going to be our “Last Halloween”


Hexadecimal;72904 said:
well... it's not bad... but it kind of switches perspectives halfway through the story...
in the beginning you were referring to yourself in the 3rd person... then you suddenly switched to using "I" and "we"... was that intentional?


Sorry I had a good idea but I had to go to bed soon so I made it really quick so i wouldnt forget anything.


EDIT: FIXED
 
Re: The Last Halloween

It's not horrible. And as hex already pointed out you switch from third person to first person my input is when you're doing conversations you need to make a new paragraph like so:

Vegeta;72895 said:
Tyler ran quickly in the darkness over to his friend Colin’s house. Colin was about 6’5 and was only 12 years old going on 13. Colin ran out of his house with a duffel bag full of toilet paper.
"Who else is coming?” asked Colin.
"Well if we can get mesa… then probably… 3 people…"
"That’s just great” Colin replies.
"Well at least we will have more toilet paper to ourselves!” said Tyler.
 
Re: The Last Halloween

Sorry I will tommarrow.. i g2g


Why does no body like me? what is wrong with me... I will never fit in in life... this is the only place that makes me feel like home.. Thank you.
 
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