The side i try to hide

[blue crow]

The side i try to hide

Heres a poem i made during 9 th period listing all of my negatives in life. But be warned i am not as good as anyone else here so dont expect a lot out of me.

To shy to cry, to shy to say hi to a girl that destiny brought me to her. My heart aches to be with her but her heart is already taken. My mind is at war with me some times my pain is just a game to my mind to gain enjoyment from. Has god decided to make me suffer cause of the girl i like and so alike is already taken? Is death my only cure for my madness? and when will things go my way? Thoughts of hate can destroy my fate. Games and dreams are my only escape even if they only last an hour then i must face the horrors in my mind. What is my purpose was i made to love the girl? or be gods punching bag?

 

[droded]

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+Rep.

 

[blue crow]

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Thanks i think if i were to have a theme song this would be the song. YouTube - NIRVANA - smells like teen spirit

 

[Angel]

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That's pretty good - +rep

 

[Steve]

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Not bad at all. Well done.

 

[blue crow]

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Part two

Now she is in my dreams and countless thoughts about her that never end. My life is like a game of monopoly but instead of earning money I only get pain. I am too afraid to her how I fell because I am afraid to ruin our friendship. She is the only thing in my worth living for. Everyone else treats my like I was worthless. I am surrounded by the shadow of hate a fate that I can not escape. Abandoned as a child I have no idol to look up too. No one wants me even my own father left me and my mom when I was only three. How can people try to understand me when my dad didn’t even try to?

 

[black.]

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deep stuff dude....+rep

 

[MikeMoose]

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... Are we aloud to say what we really think and feel about the poem, even if its not exactly what someone might wanna hear?

 

[Angel]

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I think the phrase you are looking for here is Constructive Criticism - and don't forget that poetry is quite a personal medium and not necessarily to everyone's tastes...

 

[blue crow]

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Yeah its my felling so not everyone is goona exactly like it. Besides i wrote that during 9 th period.

 

[Triz]

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DEEP. My dad is NEVER home. I know what your coming from too. +REP

 

[Shadow Knight]

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blue crow I know how you feel it sucks dude just keep your mind off it at first its hard but then you almost forget about her and you feel like crap just... try and keep your mind off it dude.

 

[Triz]

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blue crow I know how you feel it sucks dude just keep your mind off it at first its hard but then you almost forget about her and you feel like crap just... try and keep your mind off it dude.

Yea.... And I chase a girl ALL year. She moved, and she didn't even say good bye.... It was sad.... I was sad... By the way, don't try to hide this side. Express yourself. If I keep things like this inside of me, I blow up later. So, it's good that you let it out. Isn't nice that you can tell people you don't know your feelings and they don't tell other people and it starts to spread like wild fire? I about to go to middle school, so people are still like,"You like So and So". And I have done things in my past that I wish I didn't do....

 

[Shadow Knight]

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Yea.... And I chase a girl ALL year. She moved, and she didn't even say good bye.... It was sad.... I was sad... By the way, don't try to hide this side. Express yourself. If I keep things like this inside of me, I blow up later. So, it's good that you let it out. Isn't nice that you can tell people you don't know your feelings and they don't tell other people and it starts to spread like wild fire? I about to go to middle school, so people are still like,"You like So and So". And I have done things in my past that I wish I didn't do....

A girl moved away at my school I liked her and didn't say anything :'''(

 

[Rhadiel]

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I practically love this girl i know...and i mean love...too bad shes my best friend...:'(

 

[Shadow Knight]

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I practically love this girl i know...and i mean love...too bad shes my best friend...:'(

Thats how I felt... I am now sad because of all this :'''(

 

[Triz]

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I practically love this girl i know...and i mean love...too bad shes my best friend...:'(

Take a leap and ask her on a date. (Try taking her somewhere free... Like a park...) You still have a chance!

 

[Shadow Knight]

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A parks a terrible idea man! I bet he wants her to have the best?.

 

[Triz]

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If I was a girl, I would like the park.... I guess.. Take her to Olive Garden then... I have been with a girl since I was 8... Till now I'm free... This is making me sad.... :'(

 

[Shadow Knight]

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I would want to give my girl friend the best.