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Black Dahlia

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Jack's Tale

This isn't actually a story, so much as a poem that tells the story of Jack of Blades in the way I imagined it. Any comments or critisisms are encouraged!

Jack’s Tale

Ah, ‘tis a sad tale I have to tell,
Of the death of a country and a Hero that fell
‘Twas from grace you see; take no literal sense,
Now sit by the fire and I will commence

Once, long ago, before humans arose,
When earth was a land filled with many woes
There lived a great being, already aged
His powers unrivalled and his soul too enraged

Jack of Blades was his name, a name to be feared
Whom even great Skorm fearfully revered
No daemon would cross him, nor mention his name
For fear that their souls he would torture and maim

And such was the way that the earth began
Until, one day, came the presence of man
He chased out the daemons, controlling the land,
Changing the order, and naming it Vande

But the presence of daemons would not go away,
Their evil still lingered, causing dismay
And thus came the Heroes, brave and strong,
To protect their world from the evil and wrong

And Jack, seeing this, grew angrier still,
He would not be suppressed against all his will
Being cunning of mind, he created a plan
He’d put a stop to the age of man

A mask he did make, ‘twas a thing of pure evil
A perfect tool to cause his upheaval
He left it for man to take and to wear
Creating a body they both had to share

And thus Jack began his rampage of death,
Defeating all humans and stealing their breath
The Hero he dwelt in had fallen from grace
The day he had laid the mask on his face

Yet one day it seemed, all killing was done
Jack had completed what he had begun
Vande was destroyed, a desolate land
No longer touched by man’s meddling hand

But humans are smart, this much I know,
And so they escaped on the ocean’s strong flow
To the west they sailed, away from Jack’s brawn
And created the land we call Albion
 

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Wow, nice work! Thats awesome!:D
 

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pretty damn goo +rep for you
 

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Wow!

That is great! +rep!

I love the ending, very good poetry!
 
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ninjasouth;108377 said:
hmm... how about Twinblade's tale

Might possibly do one for him. If I'm feeling inspired, I'll do one for each of the Heroes in Fable.:)
Thanks for all the geat feedback!
 
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That's great work! Keep it up and +rep.;)
 

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id like to see a briar rose one the orical tells and intriging one...
 
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Black Dahlia

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Yeah, I was actually just considering doing one for Briar, because she's my favourite Hero...
 

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not my fav but i think if i had an imagination ther'd be a good story to be told :D
 
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blu phoenix

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I think Lionhead and all them should have a look at some of your work and put it into the next Fable game(last minute:lol:). Or if they make a Fable 3 by chance then they should put it in there and maybe we could hear it from the bards. You've definitely got some talent.;)
 
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Black Dahlia

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Lol, thanks muchly. For something I shelled out in about an hour, I didn't expect this kind of reaction!
 

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Nice work that was good, keep it up ^_^ +rep
 
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Rhadiel

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wow nice work plus rep....and hes already got 2 rep bars and he only a villager lol
 
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Black Dahlia

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Lol, I'm a she. But I'm a tomboy, so I'm not surprised everyone thinks I'm a he. Every forum I join, that happens lol.
 

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Black Dahlia;108562 said:
Lol, I'm a she. But I'm a tomboy, so I'm not surprised everyone thinks I'm a he. Every forum I join, that happens lol.

If they read profiles they would know, or maybe thats just what i do to make sure :p

For the record i knew you were female, mainly from the username.
 
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Black Dahlia

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That's why I picked that username...I figured then people would know straight away that I'm a girl...anywho...
 
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Black Dahlia

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Well, I'm reverting back to the fan fiction, so I might not do any poems for a while, just to give the heads up.
 
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ninjasouth

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pretty good, u must have A LOT of time on you're hands
 
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Rhadiel

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.....actually...i thought u were a guy too....hmmm i was wrong :p
 
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