A Source of Demons
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Vero Caerso
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Re: A Source of Demons
Wow.. someones lucky
Getting in someone elses fan fiction..
How cool.
Wow.. someones lucky
Getting in someone elses fan fiction..
How cool.
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Re: A Source of Demons
Great story.
Very Realistic ^_^
... Well since Fable isn't realistic at all.
It's still Realistic. xD. Confusing myself.
I'd like to be a part of it, Grey Knight?
Great story.
Very Realistic ^_^
... Well since Fable isn't realistic at all.
It's still Realistic. xD. Confusing myself.
I'd like to be a part of it, Grey Knight?
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Re: A Source of Demons
Realistic to the Fable story you mean?
Actually I'm trying to go really hardcore with that, but yesterday I was playing TLC and realised the statue mentioned in chapter one actually moves (according to the time of the day??) hopefully it points south at midnight, then I would have got it correct,
I'll probably be writing (on paper) chapter two in the next few days.
Realistic to the Fable story you mean?
Actually I'm trying to go really hardcore with that, but yesterday I was playing TLC and realised the statue mentioned in chapter one actually moves (according to the time of the day??) hopefully it points south at midnight, then I would have got it correct,
I'll probably be writing (on paper) chapter two in the next few days.
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Forever ignored by the people,
Wanting to become someone who would be loved,
Someone who people noticed,
Lerking in the dark so the eyes of the guards couldn't see him,
Finding a place he never thought was there,
A place of hero's,
A place of beauty.
Forever ignored by the people,
Wanting to become someone who would be loved,
Someone who people noticed,
Lerking in the dark so the eyes of the guards couldn't see him,
Finding a place he never thought was there,
A place of hero's,
A place of beauty.
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Re: A Source of Demons
Nice, However I think the fourth line should be something like this:
Becoming one with the dark to find some serenity,
to escape the light that made his pain visible,
?
I just don't like the guard's in that poem, It makes it look.......
weird.
Nice, However I think the fourth line should be something like this:
Becoming one with the dark to find some serenity,
to escape the light that made his pain visible,
?
I just don't like the guard's in that poem, It makes it look.......
weird.
Vero Caerso
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He shifts his body to the dark so the eyes of the punishers dont see him,
He becomes one with the dark to escape the faded light,
Mixed with the darkness .. hiding from those who hurt him.
Better?
He shifts his body to the dark so the eyes of the punishers dont see him,
He becomes one with the dark to escape the faded light,
Mixed with the darkness .. hiding from those who hurt him.
Better?
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Re: A Source of Demons
Well.. Good luck with your fan fiction..
Yeah.. Yup ok.
Well.. Good luck with your fan fiction..
Yeah.. Yup ok.