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thought i'd give a small taster

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thought i'd give a small taster

ok well im gonna start working on a new story/novel/first chapter of the previous two
so i thought i'd get my ideas together and see what you guys thought. (basic outline at the moment to get some feedback and my head together then i may start writing it properly)

ok it's set on a post apocaliptic world thats going under the codename Outland (any WoW fanboys could guess wats coming lol) an evil cult managed to summon a demon going for the whole world domination lark. but it went wrong the demon couldn't properly enter this world as it tried to force its way through the gateway it managed to cause some sort of explosion alomost destroying the world. but not quite now large chunks float around in the "void" inhabited by small clans who have been altered by arcane energies creating different breeds of what were humans and sometimes other creatures (maybe a giant super-intelligent bunny) all of these clans are now at war as hatred built up. centuries have passed and even now new races are mutating or being discovered in this ever changing world. and thats where a small boy comes in (if you can call him a boy remember he isnt human so who knows what he is *taps nose*) alone in a cave left to die by his parents as a new breedmutated by the crystals within and the stream of Demon's blood outside.
(the demon managed to get through as the world was tearing apart and felled by the humans, remember it was decades after that they split into clans)

so what do you think?

EDIT: sorry for the spelling of thought in the title
 

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Re: thoughted i give a small taster

You could get an Admin or Tsuyu to fix that in your title..

Well it sounds good, looking forward to it ^_^
 

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Re: thoughted i give a small taster

yeah now comes the hard part..... writing it lol
if an admin could change the title i'd appreciate it (cant be bothered to pm one lol)
 

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Re: thoughted i give a small taster

Done and done. :D
 
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:w00t: wow very good hurry up and tell me more i find the bunny thing hillarious:lol: :lol: good work mate...
 

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Re: thought i'd give a small taster

lol thanks angel and thanks sir scowa ill get on it straight away

EDIT:Sir scowa you cant receive pm's for some reason so i couldnt reply but yes i will help u out lol first you should go introduce yourself in oakvale town square you'lkl get to know people and people will get to know you
 

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Re: thought i'd give a small taster

sorry just need sir scowa to notice this thread
*delete this post when you want*
 

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Strange, I can't seem to send PMs to him either...
 

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Re: thought i'd give a small taster

ok can we bring tis back on topic now. sir Scowa's pm is workin so guys wat did u think
 

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Re: thought i'd give a small taster

how bout this as a starter (not final just an intro)

In a galaxy far far away....
well not really that far away actually its not even real! but then who cares it sounds good. sorry a bit off track there *clears throat* Is a small world called "insert good name here." God this guy is lazy! Stealing the star wars entry then not even bothering to name the world! well anyway, a cult called the cult of the Damned (wow never saw that coming) was hard at work planning the awakening of their God... "that demon guy" OH FOR **** SAKE!! I cant work like this! thats it you just lost yourselves a narrator! im going to go do a movie or something, my agent said sesame street was interested. *door slams as the "narrator guy" stomps off"

and then it would start in the real story..... TO BE CONTINUED!!!! (yes this is a book just thought having a narrator get angry and go work with that druggy elmo would be good for a laugh)
 

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Re: thought i'd give a small taster

Lupus;54834 said:
how bout this as a starter (not final just an intro)

In a galaxy far far away....
well not really that far away actually its not even real!

Albion is the ancient word for Great Britain actually :unsure:
 

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Re: thought i'd give a small taster

this is not fan fiction that is why it isntin the fan fiction section
(and i knew that any way being british and lacking a life)
 

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Re: thought i'd give a small taster

Oh lol..
 

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lol np easy mistake

Now what do ya think?
 

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Re: thought i'd give a small taster

hello anyone out there?? lol sorry but its been a while and i need feedback lol
 

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Re: thought i'd give a small taster

I like it. Perhaps you could distinguish the different voice with formating. Narration is typically in italics while the main text is not. And maybe seperate the two with line breaks.
Anirep.GIF
 

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Re: thought i'd give a small taster

yeah i was doung it off the top of my head but now you mentioin it..
*goes and edits post*
 
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