A fanfic?! No way!

[Ss x Britain]

Well.......I'm not very abservant

ahhh i see.. Well, on my new character, i only have to find three silver keys in Industrial 'cause i found the one in Shifting Sands ^^

 

[MazeisMaze]

ahhh i see.. Well, on my new character, i only have to find three silver keys in Industrial 'cause i found the one in Shifting Sands ^^

nice! where was it?

 

[ScareCrowReturn]

None taken. I think it's probably the nicest thing you could do for me haha. (Well... I suppose you could always comment afterwards... If it's not too much hassle for you.... )

So I read it, like I said I did, but that was quite a long time ago haha.. my bad.

Yeah that whole going back to the past and then to present, confuzzles me, I mean, I get it, I just dont like to read like that, but m not a huge reader anyway.. But other then that, I like it, good perspective of how things could/should have been.

 

[Ss x Britain]

In the most obvious spot ever.. Right next to wear the massive gem is found! How did i mis the thing?! XD
So I have two fully fully fully completed characters now :')

 

[This is my Albion]

So I read it, like I said I did, but that was quite a long time ago haha.. my bad.

Yeah that whole going back to the past and then to present, confuzzles me, I mean, I get it, I just dont like to read like that, but m not a huge reader anyway.. But other then that, I like it, good perspective of how things could/should have been.

At least you replied back in the end

yeah, i have a terrible habit of that :/ like i said, i didn't trust myself so i had someone proof read it for me and apparently he's just as unreliable XD
thanks for reading it though even if it did annoy you ^_^

 

[Daniel Ray]

I keep telling myself that I'm gonna read chapter 2, but I never do... Sorry, my Queen. :/ Need. To. Get. Off. Borderlands!

EDIT: Just read it. I was gonna say that the pacing is a little off sometimes, but I think you caught that anyway. Love that you kept the action in the third chapter nice and short. Some people tend to drag fight scenes out, which results in readers getting bored and skipping through the text.

Also, love how Reaver sounds like Reaver.

 

[MazeisMaze]

I didn't read the third chapter! *starts reading it*

 

[Ss x Britain]

Wow, your large paragraph is brilliant :| i'd quote thebits that i really liked but it isn't easy on a mobile :/
So Reaver stroked his ego hmm? I bet he did.. I bet you rushed to bracket in "Metaphorically speaking" haha ;|

 

[This is my Albion]

Wow, your large paragraph is brilliant :| i'd quote thebits that i really liked but it isn't easy on a mobile :/
So Reaver stroked his ego hmm? I bet he did.. I bet you rushed to bracket in "Metaphorically speaking" haha ;|

Again, can't tell what's genuine and what's sarcasm XD

It was meant to be just a little joke. Id like to think some of my humour is shown throughout the story although don't get too comfortable because it can get grim, dark and disturbing

i love how you guys are my faithful readers i <3 you guys :')

 

[This is my Albion]

I keep telling myself that I'm gonna read chapter 2, but I never do... Sorry, my Queen. :/ Need. To. Get. Off. Borderlands!

EDIT: Just read it. I was gonna say that the pacing is a little off sometimes, but I think you caught that anyway. Love that you kept the action in the third chapter nice and short. Some people tend to drag fight scenes out, which results in readers getting bored and skipping through the text.

Also, love how Reaver sounds like Reaver.

I generally and genuinely don't like the first part of the story. I think it gets better later on (no spoilers ) it definitely gets exciting when it finally hits the plot line and everything beyond becomes a little less light hearted and becomes more serious.

 

[Daniel Ray]

I generally and genuinely don't like the first part of the story. I think it gets better later on (no spoilers ) it definitely gets exciting when it finally hits the plot line and everything beyond becomes a little less light hearted and becomes more serious.

I remember my first chapter didn't take itself seriously, and then in chapter two, all those jokes quickly turn to bloodshed. It was horrifying, how it just changed. :O

 

[This is my Albion]

I remember my first chapter didn't take itself seriously, and then in chapter two, all those jokes quickly turn to bloodshed. It was horrifying, how it just changed. :O

I prefer to ease into the bloodshed and horrifying images. And yes, some are kinda sick :s

 

[Daniel Ray]

I wish I could work on that, but my fanfic is basically the first Fable, and I can't change the important events, right? Like the start!

Can't wait for Chapter 4!

 

[MazeisMaze]

I'm currently writing a novel for the fun. I'm trying to make it flow and not make it jump to things.

 

[This is my Albion]

I'm currently writing a novel for the fun. I'm trying to make it flow and not make it jump to things.

Ooh, what about?

 

[Daniel Ray]

I'm currently writing a novel for the fun. I'm trying to make it flow and not make it jump to things.

Yeah, I'd like a read...

 

[MazeisMaze]

Well it's called "The Deserter". It's basically a sci fi.

 

[Daniel Ray]

Well it's called "The Deserter". It's basically a sci fi.

I WANT IT. NOW.

 

[MazeisMaze]

I WANT IT. NOW.

Give me time! I haven't finished the first chapter. I'm working on it when I have nothing to do.

 

[Daniel Ray]

Give me time! I haven't finished the first chapter. I'm working on it when I have nothing to do.

Take your time... I've got a fanfic to rewrite as well...