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Fable , the unofficial novel... and soon to be official!

Hey everyone! I'm working on a novel that, if successful, could be brought right to PM and be made into the Fable movie's script!

The Chapters are about standard novel size... leave your comments!

Enjoy!

EDIT: Wow... didn't know I really thought this would go anywhere...
 

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Chapter 1

Before the Storm


The world was a young one, oh so long ago. During those golden days, Albion was innocent and beautiful. Not a single monster existed, and not a single person was corrupted. Sin was not even thought of. Everyone lived peaceful, perfect lives, without the need to care, for they all knew that nothing would ever go wrong. Those days, however, were those days.

On the last day of the golden days, something went terribly wrong. Right at the heart of Albion, a door opened. This was no ordinary door, as it twisted and twirled in a spectacular show of colours and shapes. It was through this portal, that the Court had arrived. Three, awesome beings, stepped from the Void and into Albion. They were the Knight, the Queen and the Jack. They coveted Albion and demanded that all of its people bow down before them.

When the people refused, the Court sent the land into a fiery storm, burning the earth to a black crisp, smoking the air till it choked. But the people were devoted to Albion and refused a second time. The Court summoned the sea to drown the land, sending ten-mile high waves over shore, highlands, and everything in between. The survivors, determined to keep their freedom from evil, refused still. So the Court played with their minds, and twisted them, driving sibling against sibling, forcing parents to part and abandon juveniles, and made friend slay friend. It turned Albion into a land of chaos, and all of its once pure tranquillity, was now no more than dead.

Finally, the people of Albion broke to the Court, and worshipped them. Those survivors and their descendants toiled to raise monuments and structures, in honour to the three Beings from the Void. It seemed that Albion was cursed to an eternity of darkness, to never shine as it once did, to never live as it once did. It was a thousand years of torture, a thousand years, until something of the expected turned into the unexpected.

A man, the son of a humble blacksmith, was pulled into interest. His name was William Black, and he was the first of a long line of Heroes to come. As a grown man, he amazed others with his strong mind capabilities. He was smart, and he was strong. He knew how to control things with only his mind, and knew how to use that force to his own ends. These powers came to be celebrated as the ‘Powers of Will’.

William grew obsessed with the Court, and vowed to overthrow the Beings of the Void off their thrones. Then the door to the Void opened again, taking him over to the other side. He landed in a soul-filled chamber, lit only by the portal’s golden and red light. There was a throne in this chamber, and sitting on it was Jack, the third of the Beings. Jack tried to enslave William with an ornate sword, but William’s strength was strong and he managed to fight back and steal the sword before escaping the netherworld.

When he arrived in Albion, he stood on the highest peak, Ruon. There, the sword spoke to him.

“I am the Sword of Aeons.”

It promised to help him defeat the Court but only if William offered his soul in bondage. With the most powerful weapon that ever existed, and with the strongest show of Will ever known, William challenged the Court. The Knight appeared first, but succumbed to the Sword’s power, and got destroyed completely. Next the Jack returned. They clashed at each other until William pierced Jack’s body. All of the Being’s body dissipated, but a red ghost escaped into the Void. The Queen finally floated down to earth, and faced William. Their battle raged for weeks, as their mighty blows dug valleys and raised mountains. At last, when Albion had suffered enough, the last member of the Court fell, as the Sword of Aeons struck at her heart. Albion was freed from its yoke, its people acclaimed William as their new king. William, who now took the title Archon, had saved Albion-


Dominic stumbled off the stage, his long wooden sword fell out of his hand. The children behind him rushed forwards to help him up. The narrator glanced nervously at the audience, most of which laughed. A woman stifled her laughing in the back Her husband rolled his eyes in a sarcastic manner, as they exchange glances. Dominic hopped to his feet, brushed his golden crown and replaced it. The children smiled and lined up on the stage, facing the audience. They bowed at the narrator’s words, and cheered. Dominic smirked for a moment and shrugged his shoulders, and walked off the stage, in between a short girl (Emily), and a boy who was taller than himself (Stanley). They shared their laughs before running off to their parents and back to their homes. Their story had just ended, but now, its Dominic’s turn. This is his story, a story of a boy who grew into a Hero. Like William Black, he too will determine the fate of Albion’s people. And he too will suffer. This is the story of the Heroes. This is… Fable...





“Come on, Dominic, wake up!”

The boy’s father looked down at him. Dominic had just awoke from his dreams, feeling slightly dazed. They were right in front of their doorstep, Dominic’s head in his gloved hands.

“Daydreaming again, were you. You’re just like your mother: mind’s always wandering. Well, let it wander off to find your sister, will you?”

Dominic stood up, still dizzy under the hot sun.

His father continued. “She’s out playing by the Barrow Fields gate. Remember, you haven’t given her a birthday present yet.”

Dominic suddenly got startled, suddenly alert. “Oh…”

“Don’t tell me you forgot to get her one.”

“Um…sorry,” was all Dominic could think of.

His father sighed. “Well, I’m not bailing you out this time.”

“But Father… I don’t have the gold to-”

“It’s okay, son,” Brom took a bag out of his pocket, and jiggled it. Expensive ‘chings’ emitted from it. “Tell you what; I’ll give some if you prove yourself useful around the village.”

The boy saw fresh hope, maybe this time; he could actually get something to keep his older sister’s pestering away, at least for another year or so. “Sure thing, Father.”

“Now get going, and stay out of trouble for me, will you?”

As he set off to find the needy, Dominic thought of last year. Completely forgetting that it was his sister’s birthday, he had spent the whole day playing behind the Barn Houses. When he got back to his house, Dominic was greeted by Theresa and their parents, all with their arms folded. He spent the rest of the week cleaning after the chickens and their shed. Surely, now that he remembered Theresa’s special day, he could at least prepare for it.

Just as he left, Dominic was greeted by a small girl. Her hair was tied in two ponytails; her upper dress was slightly soaked in tears. She was crying, and so did not realise him looking at her, until he spoke. “Hi Emily! Uhh… is something wrong?”

She looked up, and dried her eyes, wiping them. “Ohh… hello Dominic. It’s Rosie.”

Oh no… Dominic’s concern melted into irritation, by a slight. Still, a task is a task, and it was either this or his sister’s annoying wrath. “What happened to her?”

Emily’s eyes turned ever more red. “Rosie’s missing! I looked everywhere. I think she’s… she’s gone!”

And with that, she broke down again, running off to her house on the other side of Oakvale. Poor Emily, Dominic thought, you don’t worry just yet, cause I'm gonna find your bear. Yes, Rosie was actually a teddy bear. Emily would play with it for hours, sometimes sharing it with her friend, Kenneth.

House after wooden house, Dominic looked for more opportunities to take care of. Soon, he had gotten what he wished for. Mrs Gown, a woman in her thirties, looked hurried. She had brown hair that reached down her shoulders, a slightly sharp nose, and hazel eyes. She looked like she was anticipating the arrival of someone, staring down one end of the road, and then the other. Dominic walked up to her.

“Oh, it’s you, Dominic,” she sighed. “He must be with some woman, I don’t doubt. I run his house, bring up his children, and what do I get in return? Nothing!”

“Uhh…” Dominic, blur as he was, looked puzzled. “Who?”

Mrs Gown’s face turned a bright red. “What do your parents teach you, Dominic? I’m talking about that filthy layabout husband of mine.” She let a huge sigh out again, and relaxed a little. “If you find him, let me know, won’t you?”

Marvelling at the fact that he already had two tasks in just five minutes, Dominic walked on. Soon he found himself in Mid-Oakvale, the town’s square. Here, business bloomed as merchants and shopkeepers sold practically anything that was on sale. Food, toys, weapons, diamonds, even those glowing potions (Dominic had always wanted to try one, but was spoiled the chance when his mother caught him buying one). There was also a tavern, which Dominic was barred from. Today, a new stall was set in between the tavern and the Miscellaneous Items shop. It looked temporary. Its owner had a huge moustache, and a very funny hat that had brightly coloured feathers stuck to it. He was quite tall, and had a well-build shape. His body and clothes gave away the explorer within him. Dominic guessed that he was a travelling merchant.

Walking across Mid-Oakvale, through the thick crowd of fellow villagers and guards, Dominic saw the small girl tearing up, again. Emily was hiding behind an oak tree. He suddenly felt the urge to go to her and was about to take a step towards her when he realised that Emily might just want to be left alone, for the moment. Passing a couple of guards who wore the usual blue and red armour, he walked until he reached the Barn Houses. There were three huge, red barns that surrounded a massive oak tree. In between the middle and left barns was a ring full of hardened sand. In this ring, many boxes were laid, stacked together to form a big pile of wood and bale. A man was standing next to this pile. He had an odd expression, like he had the will to go to the toilet. Besides that, he was wearing clothes of white cotton, stained in some places.

“Oohh! Coul’ you do me a favvourr? I’ve got to -ye know- ans’er Mother Nature! Jus’ stand here an’ wa’ch the stock fer me.”

Dominic nodded, trying to stiffen his face up, to prevent himself from laughing.

“Tha’s a good lad!” and he ran off to Mid-Oakvale. Dominic positioned himself just in front of the pile. He stood there, slightly unthinking and dazed. The Sun blazed onto his shoulders, making him drowsy again.

There was a rustle and…

“Is he gone?”

The voice shook Dominic up, a whole lot. He turned around to find a boy hiding behind the stock. He was no less than ten years of age, and there was a hint of mischief in his face.

“Wha- Uhh…uh, yeah?”

“Good.” He jumped out from his hiding spot and looked at Dominic. “I’m bored.”

Dominic immediately recognised him. He was Eugene Carlson, a.k.a. Eugene the Troublemaker. “Okay, you’re bored. So what?”

“Let’s have some fun.”

“What were you doing behind there?”

“Doesn’t matter. Anyway, my cousin told me that there’s some cool stuff hidden in those barrels.” He pointed at one of the barns. There were many barrels inside this building.

“So?” Dominic gave him a look.

“What are you, Stupid? Smash them and see what’s inside!”

The boy gave a tempting look. Dominic thought it over. He was supposed to look after the stock, not destroy them. Besides, the man could arrive at any moment. He picked a long stick up. “Alright.”

Eugene looked uplifted. “ C’mon!” As soon as he turned around, Dominic whacked him hard, first on the backside, then on his arm. A red mark appeared, going from his shoulder down to his elbow. “Ouch! What the hell was that for?!”

“I’m not just going to break my promise like that. If you want to go and break those barrels open, then go ahead. I’m not including myself.”

Eugene looked taken aback, rubbing his arm. Soon he recovered and said, “Fine! Have your stupid deed, then!” He snatched the stick and stormed off to a barrel. Struggling, he brought it down on a barrel. It cracked open, spreading out into splinters. “Cool! Gold pieces!”

He turned around in delight and dropped the pieces immediately. Masked by the splintering of the barrel, his footsteps were unheard by the small boy. Eugene had terror all over his face, now. Dominic laughed.

The man turned to Dominic. “Thanks for callin’ me, lad. You’re a splendid wa’chman. I’ll tell yer father abou’ this…” then he faced Eugene. “…after I’ve dealt wit’ this nuisance of a nephew!”

And Dominic walked away, laughing his head off. Continuing his journey, he turned around a block and into a back lane. This lane was empty, except for two people.

“Stop it! She isn’t yours,” a short, thin boy shouted, holding a teddy bear in his arms, tightly. Rosie…

“Just give it over, before I beat the stuffing out of both of you!” A teenage boy glared at the bear, holding the boy up by his shirt.

“Let them go!”

The bully turned around. “ And what? Leave the kid alone?” He laughed, dropping the boy and the bear. The boy tried to get away, his elbows scabbing away. Dominic recognised him as Kenneth.

Dominic approached and instantly punched the bully across the jaw. Stanley got back up and smiled. He pulled his fist back and hit Dominic back, sending him to the ground. “Nice hit, Hero.”

Dominic recovered. “ Seriously, don’t pick on him.” Kenneth crawled, hiding behind him.

“Awww… why not?”

“Cause I said so, now lay off, before I get serious with the punches.”

Stanley looked at the cowering Kenneth, then back at Dominic. “Man, you’re soft.” He turned and walked away.

Dominic turned back and smiled. “Don’t worry, he’s gone.”

Kenneth got up onto his hands, and Dominic helped him to his feet. “Thanks, Dominic.”

“Come on, let’s get Rosie back to Emily.” They walked back down to Mid-Oakvale, to the tree, which Emily was hiding behind. She was still there, crying her eyes out. She looked up at their arrival, and brightened up. “Rosie! Kenneth!” She got up and wrapped her hands around Dominic’s waist. “Thank you, Dominic!”

“Anytime.” He smiled and turned to leave the three to their games. “What a day…”

The Sun was getting hot on his head, so he decided to take a detour through the shady alleyway behind the tavern. He still wondered why he was banned from the tavern (Father said he was too young, but Dominic had a feeling that it was because of something else…), and so he perked his hears to listen to the many odd sounds coming from it. Drunken laughter, mostly. But there was another noise. Whispering, maybe? He looked ahead of him and saw two adults. A young, blond woman snogging someone familiar…

“Mr Gown!”

The romancing couple broke apart. The woman was turning red around the neck. Mr Gown backed up quickly and stared at the woman. “W-who are you? I don’t even know this woman.” He exclaimed. Seeing the look on Dominic’s face, he sighed and tried smiling. “Look Dominic, please don’t tell my wife about this, or she’ll have my head this time. Remember these words: You should always look out for number one. A man should be able to do what he wants, after all.”

“Really?”

“Yeah- Wait… What is that I see in your eyes?”

“You’re seeing me…looking out for number one!” And Dominic ran, as fast as he could. He needed to see Mrs Gown, to tell her that her husband was cheating on her. He could hear Mr Gown shouting at him, to get him back there. What a disgusting excuse for a man! He turned a corner and ran straight into her. “Mrs Gown! Mrs Gown!”

He told her what he saw. Her eyes flared, Dominic could have sworn he saw fire shoot out from her nostrils. “Thank you, Dominic dear.” She casually walked towards Mid-Oakvale, to the tavern. Dominic smiled nervously as he turned back to his house





Dominic dove through the front door, and looked around. Seeing no one in his house, he hurried to the backroom. This was where their meals were normally had. A jug of water was always present on the table, which was in front of the fireplace.

“Ah… Dominic, how was your day?” His father had apparently followed him into the house, startling the eleven-year-old.

“Argh!!!” He shouted. “All-I-want-is a drink. Is that too much to ask for?!”

A smile broke into a laugh. “ You must have done quite a bit of work.”

Dominic grabbed the jug and downed it in several massive gulps. Replacing the jug, he turned to follow his father back out of the house. “Sorry, Father.”

“It’s alright. I know you had a hard day.” Brom sat on a stool, picking a small hammer and chisel up, to start on a new carving. He worked as a woodworker, cutting down trees and turning them into all sorts of things.

Dominic looked up at his father’s face. “But how did y-”

“I asked around. Quite a number told me of your deeds today, you helped many in some ways or another,” he balanced the hammer on his foot while he pulled a small bag out of his pocket. He threw it over. “There, you’ve earned it.”

He caught the bag, feeling the gold inside. “Whoa! There must be at least a fifty in here.”

“Fifty-five, to be exact, and it’s all yours. There should be more than enough for your sister’s present, and the change is yours to keep.”

Dominic tossed the bag a couple of feet into the air, but fumbled when catching it, almost dropping it. Still, he smiled. “Thanks a lot, Father!” He ran off, leaving his father to chuckle to himself, picking his hammer up.





Walking out of the store, Dominic felt his moneybag. It was still the same, not a gold piece missing. “Damn… when will they ever get new dolls?” He scratched his head, his black hair slightly ruffled. “I’m sure Theresa has all the ones in stock.”

He had gone through the Miscellaneous Items, searching every shelf and table for a new doll, but all the ones he found were old: Baldric Graden, Solver Lance, Quigley the Quick… Theresa even had the shop’s so-called ‘latest’ addition: Thunder the Dark.

He was walking through Mid-Oakvale when he noticed the moustached merchant, eyeing him (or his moneybag). The merchant approached. “Hello, Lad! I’m a Trader. I wander across Albion, buying and selling wares, especially to good folk such as yourself.”

“Hi, I’m Dominic.”

“Oh! So you’re Dominic! A young girl who passed by said you have a sister, and it’s her birthday. Judging by your money-I mean, face, you haven’t gotten her a present yet?”

Dominic shrugged. “Yeah, so?”

“Well… I might have what you need,’ said the merchant.

“Oh, really?”

The merchant pulled his backpack off his back, and searched through it. Finally, he held a doll up. It had armour that was of a pure white, in its hands was a colourful mace. Dominic smiled in relief. His sister had always wanted this one, but could never find it. She even tried looking through the shops in Barrow Fields. “Isn’t that Agrias?”

“Ah… yes, Sir. This here is a genuine ‘Agrias the Paladin’ doll, reflecting one of the few female knights to ever win over the Witchwood Arena! Very rare… and very costly.”

“Uhh… how much?”

“Normally, a thing as rare as this would fetch thousands, but since you seem like such a small, charming fellow, I’ll give it to you for a hundred.”

The word ‘small’ had an effect, however. Dominic didn’t like to be referred to as small.

You want small, I’ll show you small.

“Um… sorry, but I don’t have a hundred, all I have is… ten gold,” one thing his father had taught him was to never let a merchant know exactly how much money he had.

“Only ten?” He stood straight, twirling his moustache. “Alright, I have an idea. Go get ten more gold, and the doll’s yours.”

This was where Dominic’s cunningness came to play. “Three.”

“Seven,” the merchant said back.

“Five.”

“Six.”

“Ten!” Dominic shouted, startling the merchant. The Trader got confused, then shouted back in a lost tone.

“Three!”

“Deal,” Dominic said quickly, handing him the money. The merchant, still dazed, gave him the doll, satisfied that he had bargained up to…

“Hey!”

Dominic took off like an eagle, laughing as he sprinted back to his house, the doll in his arm. On the way back, he heard yelling coming from his left. He stopped to turn, seeing a sight. Mr Gown was being dragged by the ear, Mrs Gown’s face flared angrily. Mr Gown glared at Dominic. “Happy now, you ungrateful little whelp?!”

“Keep your mouth shut, you swine!” Mrs Gown screamed at her husband, twisting his ear even further.

Dominic smiled, with teeth bared, ****ily. “Just looking out for number one!”

He continued back home. He walked into the backroom, found a small sack, and slid the doll into it, gently. He tied the top with a cute, white bowtie. She’ll love it. Walking back outside, he saw his father. “Father, is Theresa still up in the Fields?”

Tossing his son an apple, he smiled. “Yeah. What did you get for her?”

Dominic caught the apple. “Something she can’t hold against me next year.”

“You’ve got some sense of humour, boy,” his father laughed. “You’re just like your mother. Now, go ahead, I’m sure your sister won’t throw it away, this time… I’ll stay here and wait for your mother to come and help me with the party.”

Dominic’s mother had gone somewhere up north for a week. She said she was meeting some friends, and will be back for his sister’s birthday. He nodded, as he took a bite out of the apple. “Somehow, I feel that tonight’s going to be different from the rest.”
 

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Please don't give the Hero of Oakvale a name. Use a title of something, then its like the game, nobody knows who he is and so they can imagine themselves as him. And there is no fable movie. And it would be crap even if there was one. Heres why

http://forums.projectego.net/fable-movie-17222/
 

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Hmm... it would be nice to give him a title... but every kid need's a proper name, right? And it would seem a whole lot more personal among the characters... And about why Fable: the movie shouldn't be made... I'd say thats just ridiculous! Lionhead has been awesome when it comes to story telling, so why should they screw this up? Thanks for commenting anyway

I'll think about that title thing...
 

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agreed with the movie point that soap posted.

it may be good to use a little less of the games literal dialogue...kind of confusing for someone who went through all that by doing the bad deeds for money...
 

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cheezMcNASTY;351613 said:
agreed with the movie point that soap posted.

it may be good to use a little less of the games literal dialogue...kind of confusing for someone who went through all that by doing the bad deeds for money...

Hmm... point taken...

But quite a lot of dialogue will be changed from the original... expect different side plots too

I'm going to have like, a LOT of new characters
 

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for the subject of a name vs. title, you should use a pet nickname for the childhood like "runt" or "young pup" even a more generic one like "son" or "kid"
 

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Yeah, I agree with the title rather than the name; refering to the Hero as "Dominic" ruins the atmosphere for me.
 

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Let's hope Fable isn't made into a movie. Good job though. As said, The Hero of Oakvale suits just fine.
 

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Sure... I'll try to replace Dominic with a title, but for now, I'll stick with the name
 

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Okay, here's chapter two... The boy's name is still Dominic, but be patient with me. I've decided that Sabre might be a good name once he's graduated from the guild! For now, enjoy!
 

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Chapter 2
Arrows of Change


As he walked to the Fields, he felt the beauty of the greenery in his sights. Normally, Dominic would have neglected nature and its attractions, but somehow, today was different, and he could sense it. It seemed like there was a huge amount of change, about to cross his path, anytime now… Maybe it was just the wind, maybe the seasons were replacing. Maybe… He felt all those flowers, all those trees, beckoning to a breeze of difference. He didn’t know what it all meant. It could just be that: Change.
Just past the gate to the Fields, was Theresa, dancing in circles around an old scarecrow. The scarecrow wore a watermelon shell as a hat, which had many pigeon bite marks on it. Theresa turned at the sound of crunching leaves behind her. Her eyes widened at his arrival. “Oh, Dommy!”
She ran over to him. “Where have you been?”
“Dying,” his hands were behind his back in an attempt to hide the present. She smiled at this.
“As usual. Do you remember what day it is?”
“Sure did,” he tossed her the present.
Pulling the bowtie off, she let the sack fall to the dirt, staring at the doll in her hands with quavering, dumbfound eyes. Agrias the Paladin. The exact copy of what she saw last night. She smiled, brightly. “I knew you wouldn’t disappoint me brother! It’s just like in my dream.”
“Dream?”
Theresa stopped dancing. “Huh? Oh, it’s nothing,” she turned and hugged the doll, tightly. “C’mon, Mother will be home, any moment now.”
The two children walked down the road, Theresa kept Agrias close to her chest.
“I’m glad you like it.”
“I love it.”
They walked side by side towards their home, crossing the gateway between Oakvale and Barrow Fields. Theresa’s eyes strayed over the many plants that grew along this path. Flowers swayed gently in the wind, leaves caught by the breeze, a nearby pond rippled…
She stopped in her tracks, startling Dominic. “Theresa, is something-“
She turned around to face the Oakvale gate, the one they had just gone through a minute ago. Goose pimples crawled over her skin. This scene… This scene was all too familiar to her, she saw this before. In a dream. Last night’s dream. She shook her head, in horror, her cheek muscles tensed up. She let the doll to fall from her arms, leaving it to lie pathetically on the dirt road. She moaned to herself before screaming out loud, in a shrill voice that was unheard before by Dominic. “No… No, no, NOOO!!!”
“What is it?! Theresa!” Dominic shook her arm vigorously, trying to catch her attention, but she could only stammer.
“Something- Something terrible is about to happen-”
As soon as the words got through Dominic’s skull, a man appeared at the gate. He ran through it, sheer, cold fear written all over his face. “Help! Help! Bandits!”
The man pushed the two aside, trying to get as much distance from the gate as possible, but fell face forwards, an arrow protruding from his back. Theresa stumbled to the side, recovering before she could fall. Dominic, on the other hand, fell into a thick bush, hitting his head hard on a rock. He lost consciousness, concealed by the bush, unaware of what was happening down in the village…



Everything was shaded in crimson light. Dominic’s eyesight could only see a blurry mix of colours. Red colours. He pushed himself out of the bush, trying to regain some of his strength. The hit to his head was a painful one, and an energy-draining one. He got onto his hands and knees, but was immediately overcame by a wave of nausea. He tried again, this time slowly. His head was still throbbing, but other than that, he wasn’t harmed. He got to his full height, his vision improving gradually. He turned around to the source of the red lights, and forgot his pain. Everything was burning, as fire ate through the village like a hungry dragon. He stumbled forwards, falling to his knees. He tried to cry out, but his voice was lost. Oakvale, burned to the ground… “No…”
He got to his feet, ignoring the stabbing knot in his head, and ran toward the burning village. He ran through Mid-Oakvale, past many charred shops and houses. The once ‘mysterious’ tavern, now stood in a mess of smoke and ash. He slowed in the smoke, trying to get his breath back, but it was hard to strain the air of any oxygen. He stopped, took in a gasp, and caught a noise. Screaming. Somewhere close…
“Help!”
He turned to his left, towards the house where the screams came from. The door was already off its hinges, burning away. Dominic looked around, spotting a jar of flowers on a windowsill. He picked it up, threw the flowers onto a nearby patch of dirt, and poured the water onto the door, creating a wet bridge across the flame to the other side. Running across, he scanned the room for the source of the screaming. A small girl cowered from the flames, in a corner, her arms shielding a teddy bear. Dominic leapt over a flame and landed next to her. “Don’t hurt me! Please, go away!”
Dominic picked her up with both of his arms, revealing his face. Emily stopped screaming. “Dominic!” He looked around and found his bridge of water evaporating. He rushed forwards, putting the stinging of his feet out of thought, bursting through the wall of flame that used to be the doorway. Once outside, he took a long breath. Emily looked up at him with half-shut eyes. “Thank you… Dominic…” she mumbled, before falling unconscious in his arms. Carrying her with him, he hurried to his house. There was a trail of blood coming from somewhere near his house, heading off onto the coast and out of sight. Where was everyone? Mom, Dad, Theresa, Kenneth… where were they? Even the guards were missing. What happened? He turned around a corner, and almost dropped the girl. His heart stopped, his veins felt cold. He saw a body, lying in front of a house… his house… He set Emily down beside the path, and approached the body. By the fire’s light, he saw a familiar face, a face he grew up with. His father’s… His father’s body lay spread across the steps to his house, a carving of Theresa cracked in two beside his leg. A deep wound was slashed across his chest, his blood darkening his clothing. Dominic knelt next to him, wondering whose blood was strewn over the ground. Succumbing to his tears, he rested his head on his father’s shoulder. “Father…No…”
“Gotcha!” Dominic looked up and saw a man. He had a brown mask over his face, and a skull tattooed onto his forearm… a bandit… The bandit charged at him, smirking an almost toothless grin. Dominic held his arm out to shield himself, as the bandit raised his scimitar to strike. But then, there was a very bright flash of blue. The bandit’s body convulsed and he stopped. His eyes rolled upwards to stare into the back of his head, his body covered in lightning (was that even possible?). He fell to the ground, scorched. Behind the bandit, Dominic saw, was a tall man, his hand lit by some strange magic. The stranger lowered his hand and walked over to the dazed boy. “Get up, boy. You don’t want to lie around here.”
Dominic got to his feet, staring at the man. He wore strange purple armour over his clothing. His pale skin was covered with glowing blue lines and markings. His white hair also had a blue tinge to its ends, his light grey eyes were hardened by battles. “You must come with me, now. Its not safe here.”
Dominic wasn’t sure to trust this man, but then, he had just saved his life. He ran to get Emily, again noticing the blood trail from his house. The man followed him. Dominic picked the girl up, and turned to face the man. “Take my hand.” Dominic stood up, hesitating. He looked back at the blood on the ground. It was coming from his house and so might be someone he knows. If he was fast enough, he might be able to catch them before…
“Take my hand.”
Again, he hesitated. He shook his head at the blood, and took the stranger’s hand. The stranger closed his eyes, his markings shining slightly. Instantly, Dominic felt light, felt the ground beneath him vanish, and felt the world rushing past him, whitening out…



Dominic crumpled forwards. He fell into a mound of dirt and grass, not in the slightest was he aware of his position. A hand pulled at his shoulder forcefully, making him stand up. He stumbled over to a nearby fence post, dizzily, and used it to balance himself. He bent over it and vomited on a bush of blooming flowers.
“Thought you’d have a stronger stomach-”
Oh, shut up! Dominic turned around and swung a fist at the stranger, clumsily, in an attempt to keep his mouth shut. The stranger simply stepped away and chuckled. “Whoa, boy. I’m not your enemy.”
Dominic groaned and fell backwards. Stars filled this patch of sky. The sight made him yawn. The stranger picked Emily up. “My name is Maze, and I come from the Heroes Guild.” He waved to a path cutting past some trees behind him. “I’ll take you there, once this girl is taken to Bowerstone. Just stay here while I take her there.”
Maze walked out of Dominic’s field of vision, leaving him to fall unconscious.



When he awoke, Dominic found himself in a soft and comfortable bed. Looking around, he saw many shelves and beds scattered across the room. There was a thin sword resting against each bedside table, reflecting the light that came from tinted windows and a cosy fireplace. On a nearby bed, dozens of books laid. On another were bottles among jars filled with weird, glowing liquids. A silver arrow rested on a bed opposite his. Dominic sat upright and gave a long yawn, stretching out a bit.
“Finally, the farmboy has awoken.”
Dominic turned to see a dark-skinned girl standing at the foot of his bed. She had a foreign look in her, with her weird hair and the strange way she carried herself around. She smiled at him and pointed at him with a short spear she was fiddling with. “You’ve been out for two whole days. I was starting to think if you had fallen into death or something…” she shook her head. “Anyway, I’m Whisper. Who are you?”
“Dominic… my name’s Dominic-” he yawned again and got to his feet.
“And where are you from? You’re surely not from Bowerstone, you don’t look like them.” She tossed the toy spear onto the bed with the many books.
“Oakvale. You?”
“Ahhhh… Oakvale, huh? Isn’t that the village that go- never mind. I’m from Samarkand. It’s a little south off Albion.”
Dominic just nodded. He knew what she almost said: the village that got burned down. He shook it out of his mind.
“Well, Dominic of Oakvale, welcome to the Guild,” she held her arms out to indicate the whole place. “This is where the best get trained to kill scum… And when I say the best, I meant it. You’d have to be good to even survive a week here. Most don’t. Anyway, the Guildmaster told me to bring you to him as soon as you’re awake. Get dressed-” she pointed at his bedside table. There was some kind of uniform on it. “I’ll be waiting outside.”
She left the room, leaving Dominic to groan on his own. His entire body still ached badly, but at least the burns on his feet have healed. Slowly, he tossed his old, charred clothes aside and put on the guild uniform. It was a white tunic and robe, lined with bronze lines and patterns, complete with a pair of flexible leggings and gloves. He slipped on his new pair of white boots, and walked out of the door, letting Whisper to lead the way.
“And I thought girls were slow… Now, let’s go see the Guildmaster. He’s waiting for us down at the melee rings.” They ran down several flights of stairs, across a room with a huge map of Albion for a table, and later along a long banquet table in what seemed to be the mess hall. They reached an arched doorway and walked into the sunlight. It pierced Dominic, who was suddenly aware that he had not seen the sun since that- since that day. He squinted his eyes, as the brightness of the sun made it hard to see much. He slowed so that he wouldn’t run into anything. It took him a moment to adjust, but once he did, his jaw dropped. The courtyard of the guild was beautiful. Lush, green grass and flowering bushes lined a stream flowing through the main training grounds. Four long coffins, made of polished white marble, surrounded four statues. On each coffin, the name of the valiant hero that was buried there, was carved on, along with the hero’s last achievement. The statues, Dominic presumed, were the Heroes that were buried here. But the face on one of the statues was blank an it held only a simple sword. Dominic walked up to read the statue’s coffin.

Here, will lie the Hero destined to stand among these saviours. Only the purest of hearts can.

There were many more statues encircling the sides of the courtyard. There was one of Agrias the Paladin, standing mightily with her huge but swift mace. Fresh flowers surrounded a very new statue of Ezelea the Intellectual. Also there were Quigley the Quick, Reactive Clinton, and John of Ash. Dominic approached the hulking statue.
“Look out!”
Dominic turned to look for the source of the voice, and saw a silver projectile flying for his head. He ducked, just in time, feeling the object zoom through the top of his black hair. He turned around to find an arrow, very much similar to the one he spotted on a bed, lodged into the neck of the stone John. A girl ran over to him, and helped him onto his feet. “I am sooo sorry! Are you alright?”
She was very pretty and had that childish look in her eyes, hinting her immaturity. She had almond-brown eyes, and bright, smooth skin. Her blonde hair was tied in a long ponytail with a golden ribbon. She carried a short bow made out of ebony. She also wore a white apprentice robe.
“Am I alright? Am I al- you nearly beheaded me!” He looked at her in anger, but then realised how sensitive she really was. Her head drooped in guilt and despair. Dominic shook his head and forced a smile. “Yeah, I’m fine. Sorry for being angry and all… I just woke up.”
She brightened up and glowed, smiling at him. “I see… well, my name’s Alex. What’s yours?”
“Dominic. Nice to meet y-” she leaned forward and pecked him on his cheek. He stopped in mid-sentence, his eyes wide open.
“Nice to meet you, too. I hope to see you around more,” and with that she slung her bow onto her shoulder and hopped into the banquet hall with springs for heels. He remained where he stood, staring at the doorway she just entered, speechless and stunned.
“Hey, farmboy!”
“W-what?” he looked around in confusion, finding Whisper waving at him from the far side of the courtyard.
“Wow, you’re slow. You coming or what?!”
Dominic shook his head vigorously, trying to get Alex’s smile out of his eyes. He wiped a small sweat droplet off his eyebrow and continued after Whisper. “What happened? You fell asleep again?”
“I was nearly killed,” he said as they walked together to the melee rings. “Twice.”
Whisper laughed. “Barely part of the guild, and yet you sound like a Hero, already.”
Beyond the courtyard, there were many rings filled with sand. Two rings had straw dummies with targets placed on their heads and chests, shot at by archers with both longbows and crossbows. A majority of the other rings were stationed between the archery rings and a huge elm tree. A few apprentices wielding swords made of either iron or wood occupied these. One ring stood on a small island in the middle of a pond that fed the stream.
“Ah… Dominic of Oakvale, here you are,” an old but wise-looking man, who stood beside a melee ring, called out to him, beckoning him to come to him. “I am the Guildmaster here at the Heroes Guild, and I’m glad to welcome our latest apprentice. Maze told me of your incident two days ago. According to him, you have incredible potential.”
Dominic nodded as the Guildmaster continued. “We are here to teach you the arts and ways of a Hero. All in all, there are three basic combat disciplines for you to practise, the first being melee. Get into the ring.” He pointed at the ring he stood next to. It had a straw dummy in it, standing right at the centre.
Dominic jumped into the ring. “Let me guess… hit the dummy?”
“As hard you can. We shall see your worth.”
Dominic nodded again, then turned to the dummy. He drew his fist back and hit the dummy, hurting himself in the process. The dummy barely shook, though.
“Hmm… could use some help. Here, try this,” the Guildmaster passed a newly made wooden sword to Dominic. He fell into an offensive stance and threw the sword around in his hands. The dummy’s head sagged and leaned onto one side, as if it was mocking Dominic. “Ermm… I guess Maze’s getting a little too old for his job.”
This was getting frustrating. Whisper was right. You have to be strong here. Dominic’s left eye twitched, his neck turning red. He turned back to the dummy and closed his eyes, remembering why was he here in the first place…

Theresa’s face swam in front of him.
“Something- Something terrible is about to happen-”
Her face dissolved away, replaced by many different faces.
“Now get going, and stay out of trouble for me, will you?”
“Rosie’s missing! I looked everywhere. I think she’s… she’s gone!”
“Happy now, you ungrateful little whelp?!”
“You’re just like your mother.
“Dominic!”
Everything grew dim, lit only by crimson flames, filled only by smoke and screams. Then, another face appeared : the bandit’s.
“I got your daddy, I did. I got him real good…”
No…
“He begged and begged and begged, before I diced him up!”
No!

“No!”
A blur of brown decimated the dummy, its straw flying everywhere. As the dust and straw settled, Dominic was revealed. He was panting furiously, almost bending forward in pain. He looked around, realising everyone nearby staring at him. He must have yelled out loud. Slowly, like a crawling wave, people applauded and clapped, amazed by his astounding speed. “That’s more like it, farmboy!”
The Guildmaster joined in the clapping. “ Yes, a very good show of speed indeed. Maze was right after all…” he broke off, as a thin man, who wore a black guild uniform, ran up and tapped the Guildmaster on the shoulder. The senior whispered something in his ear and left. The Guildmaster signalled an apprentice to come forward. “Can you fetch the other new student?”
“Yes, sir,” and he, too, left.
The Guildmaster turned around to face Dominic, with a satisfied face. “It seems that the beetles infesting the Guild Woods had just attacked a visitor. They seem to have gone out of hand. This is a good opportunity to put two of our newest students to the test.”
Dominic jumped out of the ring, and readied his wooden sword. “C’mon, Whisper!”
Whisper, on the other hand, didn’t budge. “Sorry, farmboy, but I’ve already been here for a month myself. Sooo… I’m not coming with you.”
“Oh, well then… who is the new student?” he pointed the question at the Guildmaster.
“Oh, she’s a sweet girl. You two will get along, nicely.” He winked.
Leaving Whisper to join the other apprentices, the Guildmaster led Dominic to the Guild Woods’ entrance. It wasn’t far from the melee rings, just a little over a minute’s walk. “ Now then, all you have to do is to drive, and if you can, kill all the beetles that come out from their holes. They usually come out in waves, and each nest has a ‘king’. The kings are dark red instead of the common black. As soon as the king is dead, the others will flee. Just bring the king’s body back as proof of your success.”
“Sounds easy enough.”
“Dominic!” A very familiar voice shot out from behind them. Alex was running, her bow swinging in her hand.
“I guess she’s the new student?” he asked, with a very small hint of annoyance, something the Guildmaster couldn’t miss.
“Yes. Apparently you have met before?”
Dominic nodded as Alex hugged him, tightly. He smiled at her. “Alex! How long has it been?”
“Well, its only been ten minutes, but it seemed…” she winked sneakily. “…like forever…”
The Guildmaster chuckled, beckoning the two. “Well, children, best get going.”



The Guild Woods was small in size and had several ponds doting the area. Trees of many varieties grew tall and short, while brown mushrooms the size of dinner plates were spotted along the dirt path. Right at the end of the path, several slabs of ancient stone protruded around a makeshift bench in the middle of a clearing. Small, brightly coloured birds flew overhead, as a squirrel was seen darting from tree to tree. Dominic held his wooden sword high, looking for the black of a beetle. Close by was Alex, who knelt down to examine a tiny cyan flower. “Isn’t it pretty?”
“What?”
“The flower, it looks pretty, right?”
“Wh- Uh… yeah,” he looked at her, then at the flower, and back at her. “Aren’t we suppose to be killing insects?”
“Hmm… I think so,” she stood up and got her bow out. She slid one of her silver arrows from its mini-quiver and notched it. She readied her aiming stance and closed on eye. “Ooh! Look! A squirrel!”
“Alex!”
She sulked, frowning. “Sorry…”
Dominic sighed and surveyed the clearing. There wasn’t a sign of any sort that showed where the beetles might hide. He crept quietly and stopped at a tree with orange leaves. Nothing. He turned around-
“Found one!”
Alex pulled the bowstring back and let the arrow fly. Dominic ducked and looked back. A beetle no smaller than his head was impaled upon the tree by her arrow. There were buzzing noises, erupting from all around them. More beetles emerged, dropping from the treetops and crawling from under the bushes. “Found the rest!”
Alex pulled another arrow. “Let’s do this!”
A huge beetle flew in and tried to attack Dominic, only to be bludgeoned away by the flat of his sword. He slammed one beetle to the dirt and slashed another behind him. He jumped and crushed a beetle under his boot, spinning around to bash a particularly big one out of the air. Arrows followed more arrows, crossing around Dominic. Each one pierced the beetles’ armoured hide like butter, pining them to the wood. Dominic ducked as an arrow shot past, impaling two beetles at once.
“Nice shot!”
“Thanks!” She beamed at Dominic. He swung around to bat one beetle away and hit another into a large group of beetles. “Home run!”
“Alex, what’s a ‘home run’?”
“No idea!”
In a matter of minutes, most of the drone had been demolished. The ones that still lived retreated, leaving the two to chase them off. Dominic wiped the sweat off his forehead and looked around. “Phew! That’s that.”
“But what happened to the-”
A louder, more violent buzz emitted from an old grey tree. Its pincers emerged from a hole between the roots, red as blood. They alone were much bigger than the black beetles. Slowly, it appeared. The King Beetle was at least four times bigger than the more lowly black ones. It was about the size of a medium-sized dog, its antennae reached out to them, twitching and twisting. “Alex!”
She shot her best one, but it merely ricocheted off its extremely thick exoskeleton. “Oh no…”
Dominic charged, pulling his sword up. The beetle jumped into the air and tackled him with its outstretched pincers. He dropped his sword and backed off, looking for a weakness. They couldn’t penetrate its armour, so a normal hit would be pointless, but there must be something…
“I got! Its belly! Attack its belly.”
Alex aimed and shot, but the beetle grew quick. It landed to let the arrow go off its back again. Dominic ran forwards and jumped onto it. He wrestled the monster as Alex loaded another arrow. “I only have one more shot!” Dominic swore as she aimed, but she couldn’t get a clear shot. He was always in the way, and she did almost behead him back at the courtyard. They rolled over, Dominic elbowed the beetle between its pincers, momentarily stunning it. “Alex, now!”
She let go of the bowstring, letting it glide through the air before it nailed the beetle’s underside. It squirmed its legs in pain. Dominic rolled away and grabbed his sword. Before the beetle could recover, he smashed the flat side of his sword against arrow’s back-end, driving it into the King Beetle, and through its back. It went limp, rigid. Dominic turned to Alex, with a painful smile on his face. “You okay?”
She nodded, lowering her bow. “It almost had you there.”
“Almost, but almost doesn’t cut it.”
She grinned, wiping the beads of sweat off her face. “Let’s get this to the Guildmaster.”
Dominic tugged at the arrow that killed the King Beetle and dragged the body along. As they emerged from the Woods later, they were greeted by a small applause from a group of people. The Guildmaster walked forwards, welcoming them back. “Excellent work, the both of you. Never have I seen this much skill at such a young age.”
“What do you mean?” asked Alex.
“Yeah, how did you see us?” Dominic threw the carcass aside.
The Guildmaster smiled. “Oh, we have a few… eyewitnesses…” He beckoned at two of the seniors behind him. One was stroking a squirrel’s back, while the other had a small, rectangular mirror in his arms. “No matter, though. Alexandra, you have –no doubt- chosen archery as your main skill.”
He nodded at her bow, and she gave a cheerful thumbs-up. He looked back at Dominic. “What about you, Dominic? Melee, Archery or Will?”
Dominic lowered his head in thought. Melee, Archery or Will? Then, came the memories from Oakvale, of Oakvale…
Crimson light bathed the scene, as fire tore through the village like a stampede of flaming horses… his father laid on the dirt, his eyes unblinking and lifeless… the bandit ran, his blade out and ready… his father… his family… his village… his life… they must be avenged…

He opened his eyes and stared at the Guildmaster with a weird look on his face, knowing that he might destroy himself with what he was going to do to himself. “I would like to study all three.”
Gasps came from the crowd. A young apprentice said, “What?!” as many more exchanged glances and murmurs. Whisper stepped out from the crowd, amazed. The Guildmaster eyed him. “Are you really sure of your choice?”
“Y-yes I am.”
The apprentice who shouted previously pushed his way to the front. “Nobody has ever attempted that kind of training. Not even Delfe, or Holdr, or-or… Solcius! He’s mad!”
“So what?!” the crowd quietened down. “So what if no one has ever gone through three? There’s always room for firsts! If the greatest Heroes hadn’t, then I would become the greatest Hero this world will see for- for two hundred years!” He glared at the apprentice, who cowered and retreated back into the crowd. The Guildmaster, noticing the solid look on Dominic’s face, raised his hand to silence the crowd. He sighed.
“So it is decided, then, but be warned. Once you begin your training, you won’t be able to graduate as a full-fledged Hero, until you’ve completed all three training methods.”
Dominic nodded. The Guildmaster waved to eveyone. The crowd dispersed and departed. “Good, lad. Now, follow Chadwick McMillan here to the dining hall. Your dinner is waiting for you.” He left, leaving the apprentice that shouted at Dominic, to deal with him. The Guildmaster smiled to himself. “That lad is something.”
 

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need comments!!! Chapter 3 will be out soon
 

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Your writing is really really rushed, and you really need to proof read or get a beta reader. But otherwise I'm enjoying it.
 

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It is fun, you are doing well, a few bad things but I don't care. Keep it up dude ;)
 

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I like how you have explained why the hero does all 3 hero skills.
 

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Tyloric;353571 said:
Your writing is really really rushed, and you really need to proof read or get a beta reader. But otherwise I'm enjoying it.

thanks for the comment... I'll try my best!
 

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Firis;353655 said:
It is fun, you are doing well, a few bad things but I don't care. Keep it up dude ;)

Thanks! I'll try to improve
 

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When will the next part come up? Im quite interested in seeing the finalized version, or will you just keep editing parts into your original post?
 

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Your story actually made me read!!! That's saying alot, cause I hate reading.
 
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