Ss x Britain
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I'm still reading your fanfic and i think it is going a little downhill :S
So the queen manages to construct her tomb and sanctuary by herself? Garth is the only hero i can think of who could acheive such a thing espicially since you claim the queen is out of practice with her power of Will! :O
Also, the queen's reaction to Reaver's actions is delayed and so uncharacteristic of what appears to ne a hero of a good alignment :S That christmas moment with Reaver speaking to his unconscious wife was a perfect and almost shakespearian opportunity for him to project all of his thoughts for the reader to see. It could hav een a real character building opportunity, but appeared to simply fill the gap unfortunately :/ I crave suspense and emotion! XD
So the queen manages to construct her tomb and sanctuary by herself? Garth is the only hero i can think of who could acheive such a thing espicially since you claim the queen is out of practice with her power of Will! :O
Also, the queen's reaction to Reaver's actions is delayed and so uncharacteristic of what appears to ne a hero of a good alignment :S That christmas moment with Reaver speaking to his unconscious wife was a perfect and almost shakespearian opportunity for him to project all of his thoughts for the reader to see. It could hav een a real character building opportunity, but appeared to simply fill the gap unfortunately :/ I crave suspense and emotion! XD