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Whoa. Nice. Keep up the good work!
Whoa. Nice. Keep up the good work!
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wow that was great fun to read, thanks alot
looking forward to the next chapter
wow that was great fun to read, thanks alot
looking forward to the next chapter
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Awsome, can't wait for the next one!
Awsome, can't wait for the next one!
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i've been reading these very nice work!
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remember wen uv done done done email the entire thing to elvensam@yahoo.uk . love it so far:wub::wub::wub::wub:
are you all dead?
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remember wen uv done done done email the entire thing to elvensam@yahoo.uk . love it so far:wub::wub::wub::wub:
are you all dead?
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are you all dead?
are you all dead?
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games master
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you baga bitch your a bastard
and because your evil i get and a bastard i get
+ :angel:25
Forum-Troll;23636 said:WHAT A LOAD OF RUBBISH!!
This story is cleverless. How the hell could a little kid even lift up an iron sword? how the living hell could it possible fire an arrow that could kill someone? and how the hell would it possibly be able to fire the arrow after FALLING OFF THE FRIGEN BALCONY TO THE MAP TABLE? he is either unconcious, in a hell of a lot of pain, or with broken bones at this point.
sorry but your story sucks ass. and it gets a downvote of 1.
and I get +25 evil points
+25 :devil:
you baga bitch your a bastard
and because your evil i get and a bastard i get
+ :angel:25
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sry about the wait my town (le-win) is in playoffs right now and ive been busy and almost or am geting fierd so sry for the wait.
ok in this chapeter i start to talk about why avo chose Xugan.
After one more year of training we were ready. We look around as we pack out belongings. Looking at my home for the last four years I realize how much death has happened here. The beast that I had killed a year earlier that was sent to test me.
I look at Alida and think about how she has changed. She has grown into a full-grown woman. Her long dark hair and magnificent body was all I could think about for most of the last year. I start to walk around the city. And remember all the good times we had. I hear my name being called so I head toward it. Alida and I pick up our stuff and start to leave. “STOP” I look up. A beam of light is in front of us. You two alone can’t stop him.
I yell “But we have worked so hard these last four years!” The light gets brighter. “No you need another you have the warrior the archer but u need the mage! I send u my son to help you.” “What! Your son!”
The beam starts to get brighter and brighter. I see my reflection at first. It looks like me but all the cloths & hair are opposite colors. Time seams to have stopped I move to the left so dose it. I look at his dark clothing and see his sword. It looks like mine but a different color. I notice his eyes a closed. “Xugan this is you.” “What!” “Yes its what you may become if you chose so. Light and dark, good and evil, happens and sadness, pain and suffering are all part of life. But you have been thought so much that may expel these emotions and others when and if you chose. That makes you different you change when you see death and when you fight and cause death. When you see it you fell horrible but when u case it you fell stronger than anything. This can be use to shut out you felling or open them up. You can choose never to fell happy again or never to fell pain. Now we see what you will chose when you fight the opposite of you chose.”
“How do I chose” “Just think.” I close my eyes and think. When I open them I see a pain of blood shot eyes looking back at me. I cringe at the site of them. He grabs be and says “Nagux” he through me down. I pull out my sword and stand up. He charges at me and put up my sword and block his attack. He jumps over me and lunges at me. I jump back and swing at him. I cut his chest blood starts to pore out. He doesn’t stop he runs at me again. I jump to the left and hit his sword out of is hands. I roll and grab it. I run at him with both swords. I slash an x into his chest. Blood sprays onto in the shape of a x. My sword starts to get lighter and the other gets darker. I keep the other sword and my own. I close my eyes and open them again. I’m looking up into they sky and Alida is looking at me with some other person. Alida says “Xugan meat Nagux”……….
sry about the wait my town (le-win) is in playoffs right now and ive been busy and almost or am geting fierd so sry for the wait.
ok in this chapeter i start to talk about why avo chose Xugan.
START CHAPTER SIX
START OF A JUORNEY
I look at Alida and think about how she has changed. She has grown into a full-grown woman. Her long dark hair and magnificent body was all I could think about for most of the last year. I start to walk around the city. And remember all the good times we had. I hear my name being called so I head toward it. Alida and I pick up our stuff and start to leave. “STOP” I look up. A beam of light is in front of us. You two alone can’t stop him.
I yell “But we have worked so hard these last four years!” The light gets brighter. “No you need another you have the warrior the archer but u need the mage! I send u my son to help you.” “What! Your son!”
The beam starts to get brighter and brighter. I see my reflection at first. It looks like me but all the cloths & hair are opposite colors. Time seams to have stopped I move to the left so dose it. I look at his dark clothing and see his sword. It looks like mine but a different color. I notice his eyes a closed. “Xugan this is you.” “What!” “Yes its what you may become if you chose so. Light and dark, good and evil, happens and sadness, pain and suffering are all part of life. But you have been thought so much that may expel these emotions and others when and if you chose. That makes you different you change when you see death and when you fight and cause death. When you see it you fell horrible but when u case it you fell stronger than anything. This can be use to shut out you felling or open them up. You can choose never to fell happy again or never to fell pain. Now we see what you will chose when you fight the opposite of you chose.”
“How do I chose” “Just think.” I close my eyes and think. When I open them I see a pain of blood shot eyes looking back at me. I cringe at the site of them. He grabs be and says “Nagux” he through me down. I pull out my sword and stand up. He charges at me and put up my sword and block his attack. He jumps over me and lunges at me. I jump back and swing at him. I cut his chest blood starts to pore out. He doesn’t stop he runs at me again. I jump to the left and hit his sword out of is hands. I roll and grab it. I run at him with both swords. I slash an x into his chest. Blood sprays onto in the shape of a x. My sword starts to get lighter and the other gets darker. I keep the other sword and my own. I close my eyes and open them again. I’m looking up into they sky and Alida is looking at me with some other person. Alida says “Xugan meat Nagux”……….
END CHAPTER SIX
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remember what i told you i
love it still
remember what i told you i
love it still
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Fable_Fan005
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what dose every1 think about it so far and feel free to grade each chapter thx
what dose every1 think about it so far and feel free to grade each chapter thx
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Re: A Fable story told by me
Thought id move this into right section as i should have done it earlier.
Thought id move this into right section as i should have done it earlier.
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I thiught i whould add some fighting into the story.
I look at the man above me he looks a lot like me. His hair is blond and his armor in a darkish color. I get up and notice that my armor and sword had no blood on it & that I was missing my other sword. He says “Hello noble warrior my father has sent me to help you stop Skorn.” I turn and ask Alida how long I was sleeping for. She said for about a day and a half. “A day and a half!” I yell. Were behind we had to go to The Great Bowerstone Forest? We start to walk I can’t help but not trust Nagux. I start to feel like half of me am missing. One we get there I notice how the forest had changed. It was black as night. No longer did birds fly above the land but something much worse. A group of gargoyles looms above the forest. It is late and we make camp and a fire. We sit in a group around the fire. I sit next to Alida and Nagux sit by himself. I sit and talk to the two of them we laugh and at times Alida would cry. I lie down for a bit with Alida. I fall asleep. When I wake up I look next to Nagux who is still awake just sitting there. I yell his name but he didn’t move or even blink. “Kihgh fhea hjeakh.” A ball of darkness forms next to Nagux. I remember the voice and the language. I stand and try to decipher the words. WELCOM TO DARKWOOD.
The ball starts to take form. “Well well well look at what we have here you’ve grown boy.” The darkness is now a man it’s Skorn. I run at him. He puts his hand out and I fly back into a tree. “Why are you in a hurry to die. There is no need to fight yet.” I just wonted to sent you a gift. HA HA HA HA.” I looked up into the sky. A swarm of gargoyles was diving at me. I look at my Alida and Nagux. They where frozen in time.
I realize I must fight this battle alone. Two of them strike at me. I swing at one a chop of his head. The other claws at we I punch it in the stomach. I grab its wings and pull it down by its wings and stab it in the heart. Three more dive down I swing at one and spilt it in half I jump onto a rock and jumped into the air and stuck one with a mighty blow. I landed onto another gargoyle. I grab the horns and kick its sides I fly into the air cutting down all in my why. I see a beam fly at me. I close my eyes. I wait for the pain but nothing happens. I open my eyes. I see blood on me but feel nothing. The beam went through my shoulder. I made my choice I chose to shut out pain. I start to lose myself I can fell my humanity. My eyes start to change I grip my sword tighter. My body is bulging and twitching. I stab the gargoyle I am on and jump onto another. I see more beams flying at me I jump of into the air I throw my sword at a gargoyle. It starts to fall. As I fall I yell as loud as I can while getting pelted my hundreds of little beams. The gargoyle with my swords is falling next to me. I rip it out and get ready for impact………
As I fall I see where the beams are coming from. I start to block them with the sword. I hit the ground and a huge crater is made. I lie there feeling nothingness and emptiness I stand up and sprint to the source of the beams. I see two people running from the other direction. I throw my sword at the beast. I hear a cry. I can now see what it is. It’s the legendary white gargoyle ten times at big as a normal gargoyle. I jump atop the beast and pull out my sword. I start to cut it. It flies into the air. I start to roll of but I grab the tail. I start to climb up the gargoyle. I lose control of myself and start to thrash at it. I can faintly hear my name I look down and see arrows & fire balls flying up at the beast.
It slowly starts to head toward the ground. I run to the wings and start to hack them off.
The right wing falls to the ground. The beast cries in pain and starts to spin out of control to the ground. I hold on as tight as I can as we fall. We finally hit the ground at a strange dark temple.
[FONT="]END CHAPTER SEVEN[/FONT]
I thiught i whould add some fighting into the story.
START CHAPTER SEVEN
“WELCOM TO DARKWOOD”
The ball starts to take form. “Well well well look at what we have here you’ve grown boy.” The darkness is now a man it’s Skorn. I run at him. He puts his hand out and I fly back into a tree. “Why are you in a hurry to die. There is no need to fight yet.” I just wonted to sent you a gift. HA HA HA HA.” I looked up into the sky. A swarm of gargoyles was diving at me. I look at my Alida and Nagux. They where frozen in time.
I realize I must fight this battle alone. Two of them strike at me. I swing at one a chop of his head. The other claws at we I punch it in the stomach. I grab its wings and pull it down by its wings and stab it in the heart. Three more dive down I swing at one and spilt it in half I jump onto a rock and jumped into the air and stuck one with a mighty blow. I landed onto another gargoyle. I grab the horns and kick its sides I fly into the air cutting down all in my why. I see a beam fly at me. I close my eyes. I wait for the pain but nothing happens. I open my eyes. I see blood on me but feel nothing. The beam went through my shoulder. I made my choice I chose to shut out pain. I start to lose myself I can fell my humanity. My eyes start to change I grip my sword tighter. My body is bulging and twitching. I stab the gargoyle I am on and jump onto another. I see more beams flying at me I jump of into the air I throw my sword at a gargoyle. It starts to fall. As I fall I yell as loud as I can while getting pelted my hundreds of little beams. The gargoyle with my swords is falling next to me. I rip it out and get ready for impact………
As I fall I see where the beams are coming from. I start to block them with the sword. I hit the ground and a huge crater is made. I lie there feeling nothingness and emptiness I stand up and sprint to the source of the beams. I see two people running from the other direction. I throw my sword at the beast. I hear a cry. I can now see what it is. It’s the legendary white gargoyle ten times at big as a normal gargoyle. I jump atop the beast and pull out my sword. I start to cut it. It flies into the air. I start to roll of but I grab the tail. I start to climb up the gargoyle. I lose control of myself and start to thrash at it. I can faintly hear my name I look down and see arrows & fire balls flying up at the beast.
It slowly starts to head toward the ground. I run to the wings and start to hack them off.
The right wing falls to the ground. The beast cries in pain and starts to spin out of control to the ground. I hold on as tight as I can as we fall. We finally hit the ground at a strange dark temple.
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thx projectego but i relly wont ppl to comment my story
thx projectego but i relly wont ppl to comment my story
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Wont dont you edit all the new chapters into the first post so people dont have to skip through lots of pages to find the next chapter?
May I ask a little advice, is it a good idea to post it through single chapters as opposed to waiting until everything is finished? I was going to hold off on posting my main story but chapter by chapter seems to work well, it lets people read at their own pace instead of being bombarded with one huge lengthly story that may seem overwhelming.
Wont dont you edit all the new chapters into the first post so people dont have to skip through lots of pages to find the next chapter?
May I ask a little advice, is it a good idea to post it through single chapters as opposed to waiting until everything is finished? I was going to hold off on posting my main story but chapter by chapter seems to work well, it lets people read at their own pace instead of being bombarded with one huge lengthly story that may seem overwhelming.
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ok i think that chap by chap is beter because asmu said u can read at your oun pace and i cant put all into 1 post because i have to many words.
AND PLZ TELL ME WHAT U THINK OF IT PLZ
ok i think that chap by chap is beter because asmu said u can read at your oun pace and i cant put all into 1 post because i have to many words.
AND PLZ TELL ME WHAT U THINK OF IT PLZ
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Well, I have only finished the first chapter but it shows promise. Its interesting and paced well so far, I cant tell how that will last though until I read the other chapters. Its interesting how you have done it in first person/present tense as opposed to past tense and writing in the third person. Its bears a resemble of story actually being told to you by somebody as opposed to somebody reading a story that has been written. Very interesting way of doing things and I do believe I like it muchly. Now, to read the first chapter once or twice more, get the full gist of the opening, then I shall continue onwards, Ill maybe write ya a wee review of each chapter ^_^
Hmm do you happen to know how many characters you can you have in one single post?
Fable_Fan005;29218 said:
Well, I have only finished the first chapter but it shows promise. Its interesting and paced well so far, I cant tell how that will last though until I read the other chapters. Its interesting how you have done it in first person/present tense as opposed to past tense and writing in the third person. Its bears a resemble of story actually being told to you by somebody as opposed to somebody reading a story that has been written. Very interesting way of doing things and I do believe I like it muchly. Now, to read the first chapter once or twice more, get the full gist of the opening, then I shall continue onwards, Ill maybe write ya a wee review of each chapter ^_^
Hmm do you happen to know how many characters you can you have in one single post?
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that whould be great if u whould wright a receiw for eace one and its like 15000 char.
and im doing a few storys on the char. Xugan
in order of time:
The Birth of a hero: about how Xugan stoped Skorn
A change of heart: how Xugan changes to a evil path
Death of a god: how Xugan is killed and what he faces after he is dead. (Bigest twist ever)
that whould be great if u whould wright a receiw for eace one and its like 15000 char.
and im doing a few storys on the char. Xugan
in order of time:
The Birth of a hero: about how Xugan stoped Skorn
A change of heart: how Xugan changes to a evil path
Death of a god: how Xugan is killed and what he faces after he is dead. (Bigest twist ever)
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It'll either be a review of each chapter or a review of the entire story as a whole (up to whichever is the most recently released chapter) but I shall make a point to do so ^_^
Yeesh 15k characters, damn, I can see this is going to pose problems. Im going to get like half a chapter to a single post >.<
Fable_Fan005;29222 said:
It'll either be a review of each chapter or a review of the entire story as a whole (up to whichever is the most recently released chapter) but I shall make a point to do so ^_^
Yeesh 15k characters, damn, I can see this is going to pose problems. Im going to get like half a chapter to a single post >.<
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[FONT="]“Wake up Xugan your journey is not over Skorn is still out there” I wonder if I am dreaming I say “Why do I have this power” “Because you shut out the world for your safety, you fought when it was necessary, you fear and yet cause death you war good nor evil you are twilight. Now open your eyes.” I open my eyes to see a dark temple in the distance the beast lie drenched in blood. I am bleeding just as bad. I start to get dizzy and sit down. I now have control of my body again I see a small figure run at me I’m two tired to fight. The beast jumps into the air. All of the sudden an arrow flies into the beast. I look over to see Alida and Nagux running to me. Alida yells out “Xugan!” I feel happy to hear her voice again. I see Skorn walking behind them. “Alida behind you!” “What” “Skorn is behind you” “What are you talking about” I look again and no one is there but Nagux” “Are you alright Xugan” Nagux Starts to cast a healing spell on me. I feel better then ever. “Thank you Nagux” I say to him. He doesn’t make a move he just says “Where here”…[/FONT]
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[FONT="]“What do you mean?” I ask. He starts to walk to the temple and we follow. Even the beasts would not head up there. Alida grabs my hand as we walk together. We reach the temple and see a throne of thorns and fire crawling up the walls. A man is in the throne he lays still and wouldn’t move. The Doors shut behind us. We prepare to fight. The man stands and speaks in that language. I now can understand completely. “Hello might Xugan so you are the one my son speak of. I see you have brought the trinity along. SKORN” Two holes of darkness open along the walls and a bolt of fire and darkness collide together in the middle of the room. Skorn stand in the middle of the room….[/FONT]
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[FONT="]“Yes my father” “Take them” Skorn dashes at us, I jump behind him and Nagux shots a lightning bold at him, he deflects it back at him. He dives at the ground. Alida pulls out her bow and shots at him. Catches the arrow in his hands and cuts himself. He drops the arrow and grabs her by the neck and throws her into a wall. I run up to him and slash at him. He jumps onto the sword. I am amazed at how little he weighs. He flips behind me and cuts my back with a claw. I yell out in pain. I realize that I can fell pain again. I know I must be careful. Alida is lying on the ground and Nagux is starting another spell I run to the door and cut open the locks. I grab Alida and we run outside. She jumps through the roof and in front of us. He runs at us and I close my eyes…[/FONT]
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[FONT="]10=Battle of the gods [/FONT]
:'DAlmost to the final battle:'(
DAlmost to the final battle:'(
START CHAPTER EIGHT
THE HOLY TRINITY
[FONT="]“Wake up Xugan your journey is not over Skorn is still out there” I wonder if I am dreaming I say “Why do I have this power” “Because you shut out the world for your safety, you fought when it was necessary, you fear and yet cause death you war good nor evil you are twilight. Now open your eyes.” I open my eyes to see a dark temple in the distance the beast lie drenched in blood. I am bleeding just as bad. I start to get dizzy and sit down. I now have control of my body again I see a small figure run at me I’m two tired to fight. The beast jumps into the air. All of the sudden an arrow flies into the beast. I look over to see Alida and Nagux running to me. Alida yells out “Xugan!” I feel happy to hear her voice again. I see Skorn walking behind them. “Alida behind you!” “What” “Skorn is behind you” “What are you talking about” I look again and no one is there but Nagux” “Are you alright Xugan” Nagux Starts to cast a healing spell on me. I feel better then ever. “Thank you Nagux” I say to him. He doesn’t make a move he just says “Where here”…[/FONT]
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[FONT="]“What do you mean?” I ask. He starts to walk to the temple and we follow. Even the beasts would not head up there. Alida grabs my hand as we walk together. We reach the temple and see a throne of thorns and fire crawling up the walls. A man is in the throne he lays still and wouldn’t move. The Doors shut behind us. We prepare to fight. The man stands and speaks in that language. I now can understand completely. “Hello might Xugan so you are the one my son speak of. I see you have brought the trinity along. SKORN” Two holes of darkness open along the walls and a bolt of fire and darkness collide together in the middle of the room. Skorn stand in the middle of the room….[/FONT]
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[FONT="]“Yes my father” “Take them” Skorn dashes at us, I jump behind him and Nagux shots a lightning bold at him, he deflects it back at him. He dives at the ground. Alida pulls out her bow and shots at him. Catches the arrow in his hands and cuts himself. He drops the arrow and grabs her by the neck and throws her into a wall. I run up to him and slash at him. He jumps onto the sword. I am amazed at how little he weighs. He flips behind me and cuts my back with a claw. I yell out in pain. I realize that I can fell pain again. I know I must be careful. Alida is lying on the ground and Nagux is starting another spell I run to the door and cut open the locks. I grab Alida and we run outside. She jumps through the roof and in front of us. He runs at us and I close my eyes…[/FONT]
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[FONT="]END CHAPTER EIGHT[/FONT]
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[FONT="]Chapters to come[/FONT]
[FONT="]9= Death of a son[/FONT]