ahhh i see.. Well, on my new character, i only have to find three silver keys in Industrial 'cause i found the one in Shifting Sands ^^Well.......I'm not very abservant
ahhh i see.. Well, on my new character, i only have to find three silver keys in Industrial 'cause i found the one in Shifting Sands ^^Well.......I'm not very abservant
nice! where was it?ahhh i see.. Well, on my new character, i only have to find three silver keys in Industrial 'cause i found the one in Shifting Sands ^^
None taken. I think it's probably the nicest thing you could do for me haha. (Well... I suppose you could always comment afterwards... If it's not too much hassle for you.... )
So I read it, like I said I did, but that was quite a long time ago haha.. my bad.
Yeah that whole going back to the past and then to present, confuzzles me, I mean, I get it, I just dont like to read like that, but m not a huge reader anyway.. But other then that, I like it, good perspective of how things could/should have been.
Wow, your large paragraph is brilliant :| i'd quote thebits that i really liked but it isn't easy on a mobile :/
So Reaver stroked his ego hmm? I bet he did.. I bet you rushed to bracket in "Metaphorically speaking" haha ;|
I keep telling myself that I'm gonna read chapter 2, but I never do... Sorry, my Queen. :/ Need. To. Get. Off. Borderlands!
EDIT: Just read it. I was gonna say that the pacing is a little off sometimes, but I think you caught that anyway. Love that you kept the action in the third chapter nice and short. Some people tend to drag fight scenes out, which results in readers getting bored and skipping through the text.
Also, love how Reaver sounds like Reaver.
I generally and genuinely don't like the first part of the story. I think it gets better later on (no spoilers ) it definitely gets exciting when it finally hits the plot line and everything beyond becomes a little less light hearted and becomes more serious.
I remember my first chapter didn't take itself seriously, and then in chapter two, all those jokes quickly turn to bloodshed. It was horrifying, how it just changed. :O
I'm currently writing a novel for the fun. I'm trying to make it flow and not make it jump to things.
I'm currently writing a novel for the fun. I'm trying to make it flow and not make it jump to things.
Well it's called "The Deserter". It's basically a sci fi.
Give me time! I haven't finished the first chapter. I'm working on it when I have nothing to do.I WANT IT. NOW.
Give me time! I haven't finished the first chapter. I'm working on it when I have nothing to do.