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The ProjectEgo Adventure

Re: The ProjectEgo Adventure

Tyloric;343305 said:
A traditional short story ranges from 1000-15,000 words.

That's right. You just got 1upped.

I'm pretty sure a 7th or 8th grade class wouldn't make you write a 15,000 word short story.

Pirate X;342470 said:
Yesterday in Language Arts we got an assignment to write a short story. I've decided to make the short story about the forums in real life and what happens.

I plan to include the following people:

Pirate X (duh)
DarkenedSoul
Dark Drakan
JohnDoe
ScareCrowReturn
Dr Doom

and either Tsuyu or FableFreak.

EDIT: and droded

Right now I don't have a detailed plot, but basically DS brings us together and went crazy so we have to engage in an epic battle against him on a mountaintop.


Wait, what?
 
Re: The ProjectEgo Adventure

Trawgdor;343293 said:
I just died a little on the inside.

Dude, what grade are you in that you do little short stories?

I have to do a 2-5 page biography on a famous poet, musician, artist, etc.

I'm, of course, doing mine on Les Paul.

I wish I had to do a project like that properly, with full license to go as far with it as I want. The closest thing to that I've done is this page or so report on John Lennon I did for history (people who have changed the world sort of thing) last year. I got an A+ for it, and it's stuck to the fridge. :D
 
Re: The ProjectEgo Adventure

Trawgdor;343421 said:
I'm pretty sure a 7th or 8th grade class wouldn't make you write a 15,000 word short story.

WOOOOOOSH.

Right over your head.
 
Re: The ProjectEgo Adventure

Ok here is the semi-final cast! (sorry I havent reported on it :()
Pirate X
JohnDoe
Dark Drakan
Tsuyu (dies)
DarkenedSoul
Dr Doom
droded

Unfortunatly droded, I had to capitalize your name.

And here is the rough draft of the story. Yes the ending is forced blah blah blah, w/e.

The ProjectEgo Adventure​
By Joe McBob​
Standing in the rain in front of The ProjectEgo house, Pirate X began to fiddle with his thumbs while waiting for Dark Drakan. When Dark Drakan finally came out, he said “I have received the Scroll of the Dead.”
“That is good,” Pirate X replied. “now that we have it, Dr Doom cannot get it and defeat us.”
“Why don’t we go back to the HQ and meet up with droded to discuss our plan of action?” Dark Drakan suggested.
“Good idea. I could also use a nap.” Pirate X agreed.
Jumping onto the backs of their horses, the two heroes rode on back to their hometown of Kinadar. When they got there, they found droded and JohnDoe waiting for them.
“What took you so long?” JohnDoe demanded.
“Nothing. It’s just that there were many traps in the house.” Drakan replied.
“Well, I think I’ll go turn in for today.” Pirate X said.
Walking to his bedroom, Pirate X lay in bed thinking.
“Why am I doing this?”
“How did I get involved in this mess?”
“Will I ever get the Fantasy sword and defeat Dr Doom and DarkenedSoul?”
Then, Dark Drakan walked into the room. He said “You okay? You normally don’t get tired from riding on horseback.”
“Nah, it’s just that I have a lot on my mind. I’ve been wondering why I’m a Scroll Hunter, and why Dr Doom is our enemy.” Pirate X replied.
“Well, you’re a Scroll Hunter because you wanted to know more about Canadia and you wanted to power up Gadame. Dr Doom is our enemy since you took the Scroll of the Wandering from him. That Scroll is what kept him immortal and never-aging.” Drakan replied.
“That’s true. Say, whatever happened to Tsuyu?” Pirate X inquired.
“I’m afraid that he was killed by Dr Doom while I was getting the Scroll of the Dead.” Drakan said.
“Gasp! No! How could it be!” Pirate X said, taken aback by the startling news.
“Dr Doom’s henchmen took him to his lair and killed him. JohnDoe barely made it back himself.” Drakan said.
“Well then, that gives me one more reason to kill him.” Pirate X said.
“Speaking of which, Droded finally invented his Transporto-Mater-O.” Drakan said with a grin.
“So that means we can get to Dr Dooms lair!” Pirate X figured out.
“Correct. But he said he could only transport one person, and one person only.” Drakan said solemnly.
“That means I’m going. But first, I need the Fantasy sword.” Pirate X said.
“Ta-daa! Here it is!”Dark Drakan announces with a wide smile, while pulling out a medium-sized sword.
“How in Canadia did you acquire the blade?!?!” Pirate X asked with bright eyes.
“I found it lying next to the Stone with a note, saying ‘For the one who vanquishes Dr Doom.’.” Drakan replies.
“Interesting. Does it have the two Stones inserted?” Pirate X asked.
“Yes. I just put in the Living and the Wandering Stones in.” Drakan replied.
“Excellent. Now I’ll have to see Droded about that machine of his….”
Walking down the hall to the main lobby, where a machine with many electrical cords and pipes lay, Pirate X spotted Droded.
“I understand this machine can take me to Dr Doom.” Pirate X said.
“Yes indeed, it can. Do you have the Fantasy sword?” Droded asked.
“Yep. It’s all packed up and ready to go.” Pirate X replied.
Flipping a switch, Droded stepped back, as a bright light engulfed the room, and a few seconds later a bright rainbow light in the appearance of a portal came into view. Setting it to the location of Dr Doom’s HQ, Droded announced it was ready. Stepping into the portal, Pirate X felt a little light-headed, and then….
Suddenly standing in what appeared to be a dark forest, Pirate X could dimly see a light ahead. Running towards it, he saw it was Dr Doom’s HQ. Drawing the Fantasy sword, he cut down the door. When DarkenedSoul appeared, Pirate X lifted him off his feet and demanded to know where Dr Doom’s physical manifestation was. In a wave of fear, he pointed toward a bedroom. Tossing him against a statue, Pirate X proceeded to the bedroom. Inside, asleep, was Dr Doom’s manifestation. Pulling out the sword, Pirate X tried to slice through. But upon hearing the muffled cry of DarkenedSoul, he immediately jumped up from his bed.
“Who goes there?!” yelled Dr Doom’s manifestation.
The sword passing through thin air, Pirate X charged.
Quickly pulling out a katana, the two engaged in a lengthy sword fight. About 10 minutes later, Dr Doom’s manifestation fell down from exhaustion. Smirking, Pirate X said “It’s all over!”

1 month later

Proceeding down the hall of Pirate X’s HQ, Pirate X motioned for JohnDoe to come over.
“Take a look at this here.” Pirate X said.
“Looks very peculiar, I agree.” JohnDoe agreed.
“What could it mean?” Pirate X asked.
“It means that the world is now at peace.” JohnDoe replied.
What it was, was a bone from Dr Doom’s physical manifestation, as Dr Doom is actually not a physical being naturally.

[youtube]dy5eGK026HE[/youtube]
^should play when you finish reading
 
Re: The ProjectEgo Adventure

Is it supposed to have so much dialogue and so few details? I mean, I don't pretend that I am a story expert, and I haven't written a short story in over a month (I should probably do that sometime) but if you want my opinion:
1. More details, where are you? What sounds are going on? What is the smell in the air? Are you tingling? How does everything look?

2. Punctuation...

Other than that, seems interesting.
 
Re: The ProjectEgo Adventure

Firis;343872 said:
Is it supposed to have so much dialogue and so few details? I mean, I don't pretend that I am a story expert, and I haven't written a short story in over a month (I should probably do that sometime) but if you want my opinion:
1. More details, where are you? What sounds are going on? What is the smell in the air? Are you tingling? How does everything look?

2. Punctuation...

Other than that, seems interesting.
Well, it IS still a rough draft. But I'm glad you like it.
 
Re: The ProjectEgo Adventure

Pirate X;343871 said:
Unfortunatly droded, I had to capitalize your name.

No worries, and +Rep for caring.

Not many people really acknowledge the lower-case D. :thumbsup:
 
Re: The ProjectEgo Adventure

Here is the final version!
The ProjectEgo Adventure
By Pirate X​
Standing in the rain in front of the House of the Dead, Pirate X looked off into the distance, waiting for his companion. When Dark Drakan emerged, he asked “Did you get the Dead Stone?”
“Yes. Does Gadame need to be fitted with a Dead Scroll first?” Dark Drakan asked.
“No. I keep a record in my portfolio of all of the things I do with my sword. It said I already fitted it, so no need for a scroll.” Pirate X replied.
“Then, we should head back to the HQ and meet up with Droded and JohnDoe.” Drakan said.
And so, the two heroes rode back to their HQ. At the HQ, they looked around and found no one working.
“Everyone must have gone to bed. JohnDoe and Droded even. Well, it is 2 in the morning.” Pirate X cheerfully said.
Heading to his room, Pirate X had a bit of time alone before nodding off.
“Was this an opportune moment to get the Dead Stone?”
“Will I claim the Fantasy Sword and defeat Dr Doom?”
“What is Dr Doom planning? And will I figure it out in time?”
In the morning, when everyone got up, Pirate X noticed a lull in the activity of the HQ. Deciding to look for JohnDoe and Droded to tell them about the Dead Stone. Walking towards the mess hall, he found Dark Drakan conversing with them. Strolling over, he greeted them.
“Good morning.” Pirate X said.
“H’lo” JohnDoe and Droded replied.
“I see Dark Drakan told you about the Dead Stone, eh?” Pirate X asked.
“Yes. I’ve been thinking. Why don’t we see if we can pull out the Fantasy Sword? It has been a couple of months now. I’m sure you’ve proven yourself when you defeated Dr Doom’s last incarnation.” JohnDoe said.
“Indeed. Let’s go to the Site after we’re all done eating.” Pirate X agreed.
After eating their breakfast, the four of them rode off on horseback towards the Site, where the fabled Fantasy Sword lay stuck in a magical rock. Legend has it that the one who proves himself worthy can pluck the sword and vanquish any evil. When the four of them arrived, they found the Sword still stuck. Trying with all of his might, Pirate X did not pull out the sword. But, JohnDoe mentioned that maybe brute force isn’t the only way.
“Really? I should try with some magic, eh?” Pirate X asked.
“Yes indeed. Try not to make a spectacle of it, though. Wouldn’t want prying eyes.” JohnDoe agreed.
Using a bit of magic to gather strength, Pirate X succeeded in pulling out the Sword. Cheering, he waved it around, and make some spectacular slashes. Riding back to the HQ, he announced in a report that he would vanquish Dr Doom with it.
Later that night, he decided to introspect himself.
“Will the Fantasy Sword work?”
“What if it doesn’t? What if Gadame is the true Fantasy Sword?”
“But, why didn’t it work before?”
After that last thought, Dark Drakan wandered in.
“Droded said he and JohnDoe have a way to transport you to Dr Doom’s lair.” Dark Drakan said.
“He said that he finished the teleporter, after he importunely asked the tech crew for more supplies.” Dark Drakan continued.
“That’s great! I can go tomorrow, and the final duel will begin. Dr Doom will pay for what he has done to our families, and to Tsuyu.” Pirate X said, both mournfully and angrily.
“Correct. Now, get some sleep. His incarnation appears only bimonthly, so this’ll be your only chance for two whole months.” Dark Drakan agreed.
Nodding off to Dreamland, Pirate X soon awoke 10 hours later to a faint humming sound. Getting up and walking to the main lobby, he saw Droded and JohnDoe setting up the teleporter.
“Just configuring this rig to Dr Doom’s lair.” JohnDoe explained.
“Now when you get there, there should be another portal in the basement. What you do is set the dial on to AutoSearch, and it’ll lock onto the HQ here. When it does, you can just step through, and the portal will turn off when you get here. Simple, eh?” Droded said.
“Yes.” Pirate X agreed.
When the portal flashed, Pirate X grabbed Gadame and the Fantasy Sword. Stepping through the portal, a bright spectrum flashed in front of his eyes, then he appeared at the door to the lair. Crashing down the door, Pirate X charged through all of the sleeping demons and monsters alike until he reached Dr Doom’s incarnation, sitting there waiting for him.
“I suppose you are here to vanquish me with the Fantasy Sword. Well, what are you waiting for? Come, fool!” Dr Doom taunted.
Yelling, Pirate X charged forward with sword hand-in-hand. Pulling out his own blade, Dr Doom blocked a swipe from Gadame while stopping the Fantasy Sword with one of his shield. As the two clashed away, DarkenedSoul noticed Dr Doom begin to tire. Tossing an Energizer at him, Dr Doom began to speed up his attacks. Soon, Pirate X realized, he would not keep up. So he began to crash down his blades repeatedly onto Dr Doom’s blade, forcing Dr Doom to his knees. Unrelenting, he pounded down the silver blades onto the rough titanium of Dr Doom’s blades. Giving way, Dr Doom shouted, “Ok, ok! I see you are stronger than me, I admit defeat. I now give you two choices. You can kill me and be rid of me forever, or you can take the $1,000,000,000 I have instead.” Dr Doom pleaded.
Pirate X chose the former.

Back at HQ, he announced his victory over Dr Doom. Whilst the party began, he began to wander away from the crowd. Seeing this, his girlfriend, Klia, came over.
“What is wrong, sweetie?” Klia asked.
“It’s nothing. It’s just that I feel an emptiness, now that Dr Doom is gone.” Pirate X replied.
“Well, now you can forget about that, because I’m pregnant, Pirate X.” Klia said both cheerfully and mournfully.
And so he did.
(I tried to make the ending a cliffhanger, lol)
 
Re: The ProjectEgo Adventure

JohnDoe;344009 said:
Hey, I do! That's why I intentionally don't start a sentence with your name, droded.

Anyway, the story is missing some stuff. It lacks emotional drama and character development. An easy way to solve this is to throw in a piece about me eloping with Del only to leave her for Angel. I'm such an ass.

*slap!*
Really now! ><
 
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JohnDoe;344373 said:
It was my evil twin m'dear. You didn't... you know... with him... did you?
(Act 3; Scene 5 - Pregnant!)
[Cue dramas.]

This story may have hope yet.
So anyways, did you like the story?

theadventure.jpg

That's the cover.
 
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JohnDoe;344373 said:
It was my evil twin m'dear. You didn't... you know... with him... did you?
(Act 3; Scene 5 - Pregnant!)
[Cue dramas.]

This story may have hope yet.

Heh. ^^; Well uhh... it might be yours? *up next on Jerry Springer: WHO DA BABY DADDY?!*
 
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Why is it when I read you'r threads, I always find you wanting to do something really evil to DS.. :[
 
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Wooo! Can I write one too?

Once upon a time, there was an evil troll. One day the troll got tired of killing goats, so he crawled out from under his bridge and into the sunlight. Day after day he wandered the wilderness, harassing traveling bards and traders by calling them names, asking them annoying questions, and trying on their underwear.

Eventually his travels brought him to the land of Projectego. Passing a pile of dead bots, he made his way into town. He began shouting stupid and racist things at everyone, and soon he had gotten into a debate with some of the lowly villagers. The guards soon caught wind of all the noise and went to investigate. Upon their arrival, they found the troll bothering the villagers about all their various usernames and signatures. One of the guards wiped out his trusty BANHAMMA and smashed his arse so far into the ground that he shot out the other side of the earth and into space.

And they all lived happily ever after. Oh, and there was a dragon too.

The End.

*No this is not an attack on anyone. TJ is not inferring that anyone is a troll.*
 
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Your story is actually quite good. I think a sequel to that would be AWESOME!<3.(serious)


XD